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Hello, Edge Community. I am looking for feedback on my read for this script. Feedback on both technique and audio are welcome. Thank you for your time.
Spec: The user will be guided through the training course by a Professor avatar. The professor is between 50 and 60 years old. The speaker will lead through the training as a (sometimes a little bit absent-minded) professor. The voice should be friendly and inviting. He should convey this dry topic in a playful, relaxed, and factual way. The target-group is employees in technical development, but also people who only deal with the topic on the periphery.
Script: There are different variants of hybrid drives. One of them is the so-called parallel hybrid. For this variant, the electric motor and the combustion engine work together to propel the vehicle, by having both of them connected to the transmission. When fuel reaches the engine or the electric motor is switched on, the generated power propels the car. The energy management system determines when to operate the electric motor and when to switch to the internal combustion engine.
Hello, Edge Community. I am looking for feedback on my read for this script. Feedback on both technique and audio are welcome. Thank you for your time.
Spec: Male between the ages of 50-60. Narration track will accompany a 360 video presentation on the disease state and effects of diabetic macular edema. The role is of a physician so the reading should be warm and reassuring to give viewers a feeling of comfort.
Script: Hello! I’m Dr. Meyer and today I’ll answer those questions to help you better understand your disease, how treatment works, and the results typically seen by patients who follow their recommended treatment schedule.
Let’s start by taking a closer look inside of your eye.
Diabetic macular edema, or DME, is a severe, vision threatening complication of diabetes that occurs when damaged blood vessels leak fluid into the macula, the part of your retina responsible for sharp, straight-ahead vision. This fluid buildup can cause the macula to swell and thicken, which can disrupt your vision.
Hello, Edge Community. I am looking for feedback on my read for this script. Feedback on both technique and audio are welcome. Thank you for your time.
Spec: A friendly “handyman” describes how to install the Fenix Easy Open Gate Latch to a DIY consumer. Knowledgeable, trusted, warm, patient, but not folksy. An authoritative step-by-step explanation.
Script: In this video, we’ll show you how to install the Fenix Easy Open Gate Latch. The Fenix Easy Open Gate Latch functions as both a handle and a latch for wood, vinyl or metal gates. After this simple installation, your Fenix Easy Open Gate Latch will provide one-handed operation from either side of your gate with a simple push or pull.
To install your Fenix Easy Open Gate latch, you’ll need a drill with an eighth-inch bit, a screwdriver or power driver, a tape measure, and a pencil. The latch requires a gap of at least 5/8 of an inch between the post and the gate.Hi Mary. That was a good lead in line. To help more with making it conversational, some things to consider. Who are you talking to? Is this a friend or loved one? Is this a smoker? Or perhaps the wife of a smoker worried for the health of her husband. How do you feel towards this persons? Be specific. Have a picture in mind. Talk to that person. Bill provided an awesome read below, but don’t just mimic him. He took a point of view. Find your point of view. I could feel the compassion trying to work its way through. Find a way to make it real for you. I hope this helps.
Boom! Love your voice! Made me sit up and pay attention. Liked the playfulness with the kids line. Keep exploring that more. Couple of items. Numbers in scripts are importance, so emphasize sixteen. Emphasize does not necessarily mean punch. It means find a reason and a way to make ‘sixteen’ an important point. “Before” does not feel like the right word to emphasize in the last line. Try ways to make this feel like a more urgent call to action. Digging the overall energy. Stay safe, stay warm.
Steve. Your read was great for the vibe of this company, which seems like a cool young company. Really nice! You definitely connected with the fun. I agree with the comments on the choppiness. I’m wondering if there is some gating going on with your equipment where perhaps the lower frequencies are being dropped? A couple of interpretation thoughts. Make the distinction clearer that the listener is not an “employee”, they are family. And consider ‘not too formal’ as a qualification of the word “formally” said earlier. So maybe more emphasis on ‘too’. Nice read!
