[SuperLuke]

Ok, good recording quality, docr15. I’m glad there’s clear enunciation in your read and that there’s no background noises to distract the audience from your delivery.  As a commercial read, it’s very good. I like the “up next” feeling you have in your delivery. As a critique, maybe emphasize more when you say “attack”, “break”, and ” the nation is under siege”, it may add to the audience’s anticipation of, “Oh my goodness, I need to know what happens next on “24”. It’s an opinion.

Great work

[SuperLuke]

Good job with the commercial read. You sounded ready to entertain the kids on tv, like the “up next on this show…” My only critique is when you ended the “up next on discovery kids”. I could hear your voice lose energy as you ended, saying  “discovery kids”. Other than that good work.

[SuperLuke]

Thank you docr15 for your comment. Yes, me and my coach talked about “staying in character”. In the beginning I sort of sound like my young self. Then I was doing my best to sound like much time has passed and that I was older. When my voice sounds strained, I was following his advice by “constricting my throat” as I speak to have sound like an old textured, withered, and wise man. At the very end, I had to breathe and let go of my throat as I spoke.

All feedback is welcome! How was the recording quality? Any advice on how to sound older, staying in character, without constricting my throat too much as I perform?

[SuperLuke]

Here’s the one that I think has the most noise reduction

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[SuperLuke]

For recording purposes, mostly eliminating background noises, I am resubmitting my Wise Man character read for my demo.

Is this performance better?

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[SuperLuke]

Wise man and hope script; for character demo. My coach wants me to sound like a gruff, rough textured old wizard who wants to remind his friends about the strength of “hope”. I’m really trying to eliminate problems in my home studio. Feedback needed.

Lawless marauders spread pain and suffering as the sky burns. But we must never abandon Hope. We must look to the light in ourselves and each other. That light will become the dawn of a new civilization.

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[SuperLuke]

I enjoyed the performance read of this county center homes presentation

[SuperLuke]

You did a good job with this recording. Sounded like a real commercial. Although, I thought when you said “ESPN” and “ABC”, I thought you were forcing the words out while trying to make sure you enunciated everything correctly.

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