SuperLuke
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Hi Tim,
That was a very nice performance. I like how you emphasize key words in the copy and deliver positive energy that the listeners want to hear.
There is a moment where I think emphasizing, “Now if they could only operate the microwave”, with some humor could be helpful.Hi Alayne,
That was a good read from your phone. And I think you can do much better with practice. When I listened to your recordings, it sounded like I was hearing Alexa for e-learning. Practice connecting and engaging with your listeners more as you perform your copies.Hi,
I enjoyed hearing the recordings. But there were times in the second recording when I couldn’t hear everything you said about Honest Tea.The Spotify commercial feels like you are being too informal/ giving information. As a listener, I didn’t feel engaged. Maybe practice the copy by pretending to talk with your best friend and see how it sounds.
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Feedback about this commercial I am practicing for would be greatly appreciated.
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Which iPhone is right for you? Welcome the ultimate iPhone 14. From $999, a total powerhouse. From $799, as amazing as ever. From $599, serious value. iPhone 14. Love the power. Love the price.I think that you should take a deep breath before you read the copy, aka “The big breath”. It will give you time to fill your diaphragm with air and remember to relax when performing the copy. I feel like you need to breathe more/ have more breath support when performing this copy. Other than that, it was nice.
When you say, “There are guys who will smirk at you”, at the beginning of the copy, I think if you put more emphasis and power into the word “There are guys”, the rest of your recording will flow smoothly. Think about how the listener of this commercial will feel, hearing the build-up and the importance of what you have to say in this recording. Everything else flowed just fine =)
