Shaun Cruz
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Hello all,
Just submitting my second book narration for feedback, I appreciate it..
Thanks!
Where the Wild Things Are:
The night wore his wolf suit and made mischief of one kind
and another
and another
his mother called him “WILD THING!”
and Max said “I’LL EAT YOU UP!”
so he was sent to bed without eating anything.
That very night in Max’s room a forest grew
and grewand
grew until his ceiling hung with vines
and the walls became the world all around
and an ocean tumbled by with a private boat for Max
and he sailed off through night and day
and in and out of weeks
and almost over a year
to where the wild things are.
And when he came to the place where the wild things are
they roared their terrible roars and gnashed their terrible teeth
and rolled their terrible eyes and showed their terrible claws
till Max said “BE STILL!”
and tamed with the magic trick
of staring into all their yellow eyes without blinking once
and they were frightened and called him the most wild thing of all
and made him king of all wild things.
“And now,” cried Max, “let the wild rumpus start!”
“Now stop!” Max said and sent the wild things off to bed without their supper.
And Max the king of all wild things was lonely and wanted to be where
someone loved him best of all.
Then all around from far away across the world
he smelled good things to eat
so he gave up being king of where the wild things are.
But the wild things cried, “Oh please don’t gowe’ll
eat you up-we love you so!”
And Max said, “No!”
The wild things roared their terrible roars and gnashed their terrible teeth
and rolled their terrible eyes and showed their terrible claws
but Max stepped into his private boat and waved good-bye
and sailed back over a year
and in and out of weeks
and through a day
and into the night of his very own room
where he found his supper waiting for him
and it was still hot.Hi,
Just submitting my first ever story narration for feedback.Thanks!
CORALINE:
CORALINE DISCOVERED THE DOOR a little
while after they moved into the house.
It was a very old house—it had an attic under
the roof and a cellar under the ground and an
overgrown garden with huge old trees in it.
Coraline’s family didn’t own all of the house—it
was too big for that. Instead they owned part of it.
There were other people who lived in the old
house.
Miss Spink and Miss Forcible lived in the flat
below Coraline’s, on the ground floor. They were
both old and round, and they lived in their flat with
a number of ageing Highland terriers who had
names like Hamish and Andrew and J**k. Once
upon a time Miss Spink and Miss Forcible had
been actresses, as Miss Spink told Coraline the
first time she met her.
“You see, Caroline,” Miss Spink said, getting
Coraline’s name wrong, “both myself and Miss
Forcible were famous actresses, in our time. We
trod the boards, luvvy. Oh, don’t let Hamish eat
the fruitcake, or he’ll be up all night with his
tummy.”
“It’s Coraline. Not Caroline. Coraline,” said
Coraline.Hi All just looking for some feedback on these 3 submissions for home work.
Thanks!
FORD ESCAPE:
Come on. You’re a smart person. If you’re buying an suv, why not get the one with the best gas mileage? The Ford Escape’s 1.6 liter Ecoboost engine saves you an average of fifteen hundred dollars on gas over 5 years. Ford Escape the smarter way to get there.USPS:Tangled lights, mall parking and “some assembly required”. A few reasons to get a head start on the holidays. Fly Like an Eagle. UNITED STATES POSTAL SERVICE. We deliver.
OBSERVATION DECK:
Hello, and welcome to the audio simulation of the One Vanderbilt Observation Deck.
Please adjust your audio volume to a level that best represents my voice at a normal speaking volume to a person standing next to you.
This will calibrate your headphone level. Please do not adjust your audio volume again over the course of the simulation.Hello Friends,
Just another upload for feedback, I appreciate all of the comments
Thanks!
SPECIAL K RED BERRIES
Putting strawberries in cereal wasn’t our idea. Putting them in the box was. With slices of real strawberries and crunchy sweet flakes, looking good never tasted so good. Special K Red Berries.
Love your tone! Great for E-Learning, the pace and delivery everything sounded great to me. I bought some dry mouth gum it really helps with the mouth clicks. Keep up the great work!
Hi Logan!
I like your tone, I’d love to hear you doing some narration/explainer type stuff. I think you’d do really well at that. Keep up the good work!
