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The aim of this one was to sound conversational rather than all “salesy”. What do you reckon?

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Hi folks. This is a practice before I record my first commercial demo. All tips welcome! I nabbed the script from a real ad….

An Everypaw pet insurance policy would be great for this little rascal. For extra peace of mind when he gets up to mischief. And fancies himself as a bit of a daredevil. Head to everypaw.com for an instant quote.

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Second crack at a PSA, this time with more of a pause between the message and the organization. Does it make you want to book a taxi home in advance the next time you go out on the lash?

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Thanks for the feedback guys. I’ll definitely try a longer pause between the message and the sponsor on the next go around.

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First crack at a public service announcement. Was the tone right?

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For the 27 million Americans who can’t read, competing in today’s marketplace is nearly impossible. You can help fight illiteracy by reading to a child. And by giving a child a book. Brought to you by The Coors Foundation for Family Literacy.

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