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Greetings Bil-Bo! You have a nice soothing and deep quality to your voice! It sounds conversational throughout the majority of the read. However, there are certain parts where I think the conversational quality and connection to the reader could be pushed a bit further. For example, when you start off, the “Hey” seemed a bit uncertain. Be sure to have a reason for why your saying what you’re saying from the very beginning. That may help a lot. Also, I’d have to agree with Garprocks, in that emphasis in the name AMSTEL LIGHT seems a bit important as it not only is in all caps, but it’s also the brand name. So, putting emphasis on the brand name usually makes sense. But, overall, great job!
Greetings! Here’s my latest Commercial homework. I would greatly appreciate any and all feedback. Thanks!
Hi Andres,
From the get-go, the read sounds quite confident, which seems suitable for this specific copy. It sounds like you were connected to your copy, as I could hear slight nuances throughout the read, which is nice. The enthusiasm didn’t sound forced at all, and it sounded quite conversational, while also having a professional quality to it. But, for the “that idea we borrowed from nature” part, I’d agree with Rebekah, as the pause (I struggle with this myself) seems to take away from the natural conversational quality of the read. But, overall, great job!
Hi everyone. Here’s my latest Commercial homework. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated! Thanks.
Greetings,
You have a really nice, soothing voice! For the Carnation read, it sounded very much professional with a bit of personality. It almost sounds conversational, especially in the specific change in tonality parts. However, I think you could allow it to be a little more conversational, talking as if you’re having a real conversation with a child or with the parent of a child who’s interested in this product perhaps.
For the JC Penny read, it sounded much more conversational and enthusiastic. However, I noticed that there are certain portions where your voice sounds kind of performed if that makes sense. For instance, in the “So use your head. Buy more, Save more. Only at JC Penney” line, although it’s hard to actually say those kinds of things in a real life conversation, incorporating reasons for why you’re saying what you’re saying can really help (I struggle with this myself). And same for the Allstate read, it had parts that sounded kind of performed. You’ve got the professional quality down, now it just needs to be a little more conversational (which I struggle with). This is just my impression, I’m not an expert of course. But, overall good job! Keep up the good work!
Hi everyone. This is my latest commercial homework. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated! Thanks.
Hello, hope everyone had wonderful holidays! I have attached my Commercial recordings below! I would greatly appreciate any and all feedback. Thank you!
Hello everyone! I would greatly appreciate any feedback on any of my narration recordings below as I have tried to apply the feedback I received in my last post. Thank you so much in advance!
Hi Shmuel,
I really liked the enthusiasm and energy in the Central Washington read. As you were able to change tonalities throughout it in a natural manner. For the Polar Bears read, your voice has a very soothing and calming quality to it. I might agree with Haley, as she makes a great point. I just wouldn’t push it if that makes sense. As I personally struggle with maintaining a good balance between having both professional and natural sounding reads without “over-selling”. If that makes sense. But, that’s just my experience. I didn’t hear that at all here. Good job!
