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Hello Tom: Sorry for such a late response. I will not be surprised if you don’t see this. But,I did want to thank you for this feedback. The comments on pace and ‘speak-up’ were insightful and most helpful.

Kind Regards,
Scott

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Hello All:

Here is a little vignette on Ellis Island. Please provide feedback on all aspects of this attempt. Thanks!!! Scott

Ellis Island may not appear large on a map, but it is an unparalleled destination in United States history.
From 1892 to 1954, over twelve million immigrants entered the United States through this portal ; a small island in New York Harbor. Ellis Island is located in the upper bay, just off the New Jersey coast, within the shadow of the Statue of Liberty. Through the years, this gateway to the new world was enlarged from its original 3.3 acres to 27.5 acres by landfill –supposedly obtained from the ballast of ships, excess earth from the construction of the New York City subway system and elsewhere. Ellis Island is now a poetic symbol of the American Dream.

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Hi Bil-Bo: This is just cool! I agree with Tina that a little more ‘attitude’ on the man-bun might work, but this is really good. (Also, brings back many memories. I do remember when Motel 6 was actually six bucks 🙂 )

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Hi Jas: I did not hear what Tim did relative to the tone. I liked the pace and overall delivery. I got your enthusiasm/passion for the topic and you had the right level of sincerity. This would be a good area for you.
Best,
Scott

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Hi Kathy: Thanks for the feedback. I am working on editing out the breath sound with the noise-gate on Audacity. Looks like that needs a little more attention. I really appreciate the comments!
Scotty

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Hi Mary: The feedback is much appreciated!!

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Hello and Happy New Year! This is my first effort for 2021. Please provide feedback on all aspects of this endeavor.
Script:
Most of us know there are ways we can improve… to be healthier… happier… more effective…
but knowing how to improve is a different matter. Without guidance, we often simply stay the same.
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Thanks!
Scott

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Hi Brian:

These are all very well done. Nothing to add for #1. For #2 (Venus…) more emphasis on the word “me” in “me time.” Also, the words “wet” and “shave” are a little too close together. I would add a pause between all three actions, “wet,” “shave,” and “relax”. These are all top quality so these might be nits. Good job!!

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Hi Mary: Nice work here. The pace is just right. The word, “moment” sounds a little indistinct on the end syllable. Also, I would hit “WGU” a little harder. Maybe a longer pause before and after, and more emphasis on the letters. Otherwise, a solid read.

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