[opti]

Sorry I think I’m reading this very late. Hope you managed to improve everything. But if not, here are a few things to take in mind.
The mic is too far away from where your mouth will be. You should place the mic between 3 to 5 inches away from your mouth, depending on the kind of read you are working on.
The box you built might not work as you would want, but I would add a heavy moving blanket and this should cover you too when you are recording.
Hope this helps.

[opti]

very nice voice for documentaries narration… I would suggest you to start hearing (and paying attention) to the narrations of David Attenborough. Where does he makes emphasis? how does he describes things? which words is he stressing? how does he uses the pauses in his reads? the prosody? etc… It’s not a matter of becoming a double that imitates him, but to learn a little big more from what he does. His documentaries are beautiful, so I would suggest that if you can’t concentrate on the voice, minimize the video and just hear him narrating.
Have a great day.

[opti]

Hey man, I believe the year in the narration about Bill Gates sounds weird… like “niketeen”…
Also, some things to take in count:
– I still feel that you are reading, probably this is the reason Salma felt it a little bit monotone.
– Try to add some more prosody to the reads, every read, speech, narration, promo, etc… requires some of it to make it appealing to the ear (and the brain). Also, the Anaconda narration shouldn’t have the same intentions and prosody as the Bill Gates one or the AT one.
– When narrating a documentary, you must sound sure of what you are saying, we have to feel that you are the owner of the truth about that topic (even if you’re wrong).

There’s some others, but this will be a good starting point for you to work with. Keep the good job!

[opti]

Hi, you have a nice voice. I would add some more color to the read and emphasize some important things: “its never too early” “holiday spirit” (make us feel it), you are putting more stress in the word “countdown” but then you drop with “to Christmas”.

Same with “you can watch YOUR favorite Christmas movies”… make us remember about our “favorite Christmas movies” with some more inflections and colors. Think of a promo that talks about a crispy delicious chicken, you should make it sound crispy and delicious to make us imagine that chicken.

Also, its a promo, and you are giving us the great news that we can watch our favorite x-mas movies 24/7… so make it sound like its an amazing news. you don’t need to be loud to make emphasis.
Hope this helps!

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