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Hello! Your voice sounds smart and energetic! My main suggestion is to slow down your pacing, so that phrases like “important life lessons” and “kids to discuss” are clearer to the listener. Also, you might want to consider emphasizing more of the important words or phrases that will help bring out the overall message of the script…phrases like “kindle curiosity” and “interesting insights.” Or perhaps consider similar phrases such as “teach kids,” “take time,” “take turns,” and “take advantage,” –maybe those could be gently brought out more because you are basically encouraging the listener (parents) to see the possibilities. These are just suggestions – you will have a better idea of which words are important for this piece. I look forward to hearing more.
Congrats on doing your first homework posting! Your voice sounds nice and energetic! The two readings do need to be much more conversational. Perhaps you can imagine talking to just one person, which will make it more intimate and that will help you to reduce your volume and projection. Remember that there are ways to change the quality of your voice to express excitement without increasing the volume.
Hello! I liked the even pacing of all three reads. Having said that though, I think there’s an opportunity in each read to adjust your vocal tone or pacing when there’s a change in emotion or thought. In the first recording, it’s when you say “However…” and in the second recording, it’s “But sadly…” These phrases suggest a different emotion that will help contrast with the positive emotion that each recording ends with. Overall, your voice is clear and pleasant to listen to!
Hello! Great job on all three recordings! I enjoyed the energy of all three. One suggestion is to make sure you pronounce the product name correctly, so in the first read, “Purina” is pronounced like “Pure-eena” instead of “Per-eena” (at least I think that’s how it’s supposed to pronounced–feel free to correct me if I am wrong!) Also, try to reduce any extra pauses, such as “We’ve got a lock [pause] on freshness.”
Congratulations on posting to the forum for the first time–great job! Your voice is suitable for these two reads, where the audience is young minds, college students, educational… My main suggestion is to be mindful of your pacing, as some phrases like “determine their success” and “is anything but” go really fast and could be clearer. For the Gorden College read, I think your voice has a genuine quality to it, so I would see if you can make it even more conversational. Again, great job and I hope to hear more of your posts!
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Your voice seems to have a naturally effortless, easygoing, almost serene way about it, which are all great qualities – it makes it easy to listen to. But since music might be added to your VO, consider increasing your energy on both reads, and add a hint of punch or excitement behind some of the key words or phrases. For instance, on the Trendi read, I’m wondering if you might sound differently if you read “75% off” and that “everything ships free” as if you just found out about it, or if you were telling your friend about it. For the Revlon read, the energy needs to be brought up to the same vibrancy as the red hair color makes you look and feel. And again, image you are telling a friend about your hair, and even imagine running your hand through that soft hair. I think you’ll have it in you to let the excitement come out!I agree, it is a Nail for me too! I just had a minor observation, that each sentence seemed to end in inflection in the same way, which if the copy was longer, might become a pattern to the listener. But you really have the perky energy that this kid commercial needs, and you hit the right words. Yes, definitely Nailed it!
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Your voice sounds nice and clear in all three reads, with a nice and pleasant tone. Of the three reads, the first sounded the most conversational. I think the third read could have been more conversational, and if the audience for the third read is kids, then perhaps that should influence your read even more, with more excitement behind “Awesome,” “gross out magic” and “severed finger trick.” On the second read, try visualizing with each line what the visuals will be, and see if that affects the pacing or spacing of your sentences as the visuals are shown with it. Great job on all three. I like the clarity of your voice.Hi Cecilia,
Great job on both versions! I definitely liked the style of the second version over the first, because it sounded more conversational throughout. Your voice has an innate brightness to it!
JanetYou voice is so nice and calming, and has such gravitas at the same time! The recording quality seems perfectly clear to me. I can’t think of anything to suggest except maybe experiment with phrasing and pacing so that when you deliver the second and third sentences, they connect to or support the main thought of the first sentence (in the case of the Egypt read). I think your voice will pair really well with the images of a documentary.
