[monibr16]

You’re so right! thank you for your help!

[monibr16]

Hey Y’all! Here’s another possible script im trying out for my demo. Feedback on everything besides equipment is welcome. Specifically if you can tell who my audience is and if it has a beginning middle and end. But cetainly other tips! Thank you 🙂

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[monibr16]

Hey cbadloc great energy and pacing. I would say just give a little more veriation in the list of benefits.

[monibr16]

Thank you Toque, and thank you for listening!

[monibr16]

Nice catch, thank you Mlewis327

[monibr16]

Thank you Andrew that actually helps a lot!

[monibr16]

Hello everyone! This is a script I’m using for my demo. Feed back on style and story, maybe flow, is what im needing to focus on. Not so much the mic and such. Help is so welcome.

Olay Ultra moisture Body Wash 
Having dry skin is a struggle. Turns out my body wash was the problem. Until I tried Olay body which improves skin three times  better than the leading body wash. Better skin from a body wash? You better believe it. With Olay Body.

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[monibr16]

Thank you so much for your advice! Those are a few tendencies I’m trying to change.

[monibr16]

Hello everyone,
Another read for coaching session, all feedback welcome, thank you!
Monique

Mr. Coffee Elite Plus
Now when you stumble out of bed with a million things to do, at least the coffee’s ready. Mr. Coffee Elite Plus coffeemaker starts brewing whenever you say. You decide the night before, push a few buttons and go to bed. You’ll wake up to a fresh, hot p*t of steaming salvation. Now that’s what we call a real eye-opener.

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[monibr16]

Rob this was right on the money. Accent was great. Pacing and pronunciation was good. I’m not sure if you should say the brand name with the accent, however I would have made the same choice you did. Good read!

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