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Hello all! I’m looking for any and all feedback to this script (it was recorded on my phone, just fyi). Thank you for your comments!
Shelton Savings Bank
It’s taken you months to find the right house at the right price. Your problem is that the seller wants to move fast…if you can’t get a quick answer on your loan application, you’re probably not going to get this house. Well, Shelton Savings can solve your problem. Just fill out a loan application, and within 24 hours, we’ll let you know if it’s been approved. Call 800-233-3551, and apply today. Shelton Savings Bank…Your hometown bank.Hi RYoung! Great read and production. Very good pacing and the script flowed really well with the micro pauses at the appropriate times. Your voice has a very nice warm and welcoming tone, and is very good for this sort of commercial.
Mary
Hi Burdahgirl! Great read! Great inflection at the kid’s voice parts, very believable and with good variation in the 3 quoted parts of the script. The emphasis on Creative Builder is good too, lets people know what the product is that is being sold. Good pacing in the read. Great job!
Mary
Hi Brian! I like the tone and raspiness of your voice! It is unique
Script 1 – Advil – Good inflection and pace, your voice is well-suited for this.
Script 2 – History Channel – Good tone and pacing on this one, but it seemed just a tiny bit rushed. You may be able to do a slight pause after the parts that ask questions to allow the listener to think for a beat before moving on to the next thought.
Script 3 – Dublin – Good energy in the read, it felt like you were interested in the topicOverall very good!
Mary
Hi RYoung! Well done and well produced. Good tone in your voice and well-suited for this type of read. There were a few lines where you finished the statement as if it were a question – “the troublemakers” and “status quo” and “they change things”. Just based on the script it would seem like these should be read more as definitive statements, just my take on things. Very well done!
Mary
Hi Bhawani! I liked the tone, pitch and flow of your read! Although I did not understand the language it sounded nice to me. Thanks for posting!
Mary
Good evening all! I’m looking for any and all feedback on my daily recording (recorded on a phone). I’m going for direct but authentic and believable. Let me know what you think. Thanks!
Mary
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Thanks for the feedback Svenbot! I will work on visualizing talking to a friend about trying out the bar, good tip. I really get excited about energy bars in real life! Will try to ramp up the excitement too. Thank you!
Mary
