[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback SuperLuke! Now that I am listening to it again, I agree – the second one gets overshadowed by the music. Thanks!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Jay, good job! I liked how clear and precise the scripts were, and all of them sounded great for your voice. Good pacing and choice of emphasized words for all three – very good!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Cyeschenko, very good! I liked the attitude and pacing throughout, and I could tell you were performing with a smile in your voice. Good emphasized word choices and variation in tone, which really helped to visualize the items discussed. Good job!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Artyom, good job on these! You have a nice warm and friendly voice and both of these genres are good for your voice.
Script 1: I heard “to a new audience” instead of “to new audiences” as it is written. Otherwise, very good pacing and good choice of emphasized words.
Script 2: I liked the second version better than the first – good pacing and variation throughout. Keep it up!

Mary

[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback Elizabeth! I saw your feedback, and thank you! Working to sound more conversational and convincing, so thank you for that! Thanks again for takign the time to write your comments twice – they don’t always post to the right place 🙂

Mary

[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback Elizabeth! I’m glad it sounded smooth, soothing and convincing! Thanks again,

Mary

[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback Monibr16! I’ve been having fun selecting music that fits the vibe I was going for, so thank you! Glad the energy sounded good – that has been a struggle in the past for me. Thank you!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi everyone! Here is the same recording, with 2 background audio files for any and all feedback. Working on making it sound warm, inviting and conversational. Let me know what you think about the tone, pace, performance, all of it. Thank you!

Mary

Grey Goose V***a
This is where musicians go to hear each other play. The room is alive. The crowd is full of familiar, knowing faces whose expressions are as much a part of the performance as the music itself. From this room, you’re transported to places all over the world and feelings from all over your life. That’s why you come here, to be taken there. Grey Goose. World’s Best Tasting V***a.

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[mkell755]

Hi Akingsley, good job! I really liked the pacing and attitude throughout, it was very believable and relatable with just the right amount of neighbor next door vibe. Very good!

Mary

[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback AKingsley! I’m glad it is sounding relaxed, yes a bigger smile while reading would help this one. I was trying to imagine winning this trip and it really does sound like something I would like to do, so I was trying to convey that. Thanks!

Mary

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