[mkell755]

Hi RYoung, good job and production! Your voice is nice and comforting for this genre. Good pacing and energy throughout. Great job!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi John, first of all, welcome to the forum!

Your voice is nice, rich, and very warm. I could tell you were delivering the first script about Jamaica with a nice smile in your voice. It was friendly and comforting, and had good variation of tone in the lists. I liked the Good RX read too and would agree that it sounded just a little bit rushed, but both were very really nice!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Cyeschenko, really well done! You have a great voice for this genre. Very clear, understandable and approachable. The pacing was great too – quick enough to inform without boring the listener. I was really buying into the approach presented. Well done!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Julie, good reads! I’m hearing a little bit of echo in your recordings. I like your energy in both reads – good pacing and emphasis on key words for both. Good smile in your voice for the second script – good job!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi everyone! Here are 2 recordings for any and all feedback. Working on sounding conversational, getting the tone right, pacing, mood, all of it. Let me know what you think. Thank you!!

Mary

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[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback Robert! Agree that the first one sounded more relaxed and suited for the commercial’s vibe. Thanks again!!

Mary

[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback Julie! Yes, now that I’m hearing this again, the music int he second one was a bit distracting, I too was focused in on it more so that listening to what was being said. Thank you!

Mary

[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback Artyom! I will work on the conversational part of it, that piece has been a bit of a challenge for me. Thanks again!

Mary

[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback Erik! I think I edited out breaths in those places that you mentioned; they sounded too breathy to me when listening to them closely. I will work on that. Thank you!

Mary

[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback Andrea! Good points. I was going for a relaxed vibe, so I agree that the first one’s music fit the intended mood better. I’ll also work on emphasizing the contrasted words – thanks!

Mary

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