Mitch_Crawford
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Thanks dkosoy! Correct, I do not have an official home recording studio yet; just my office, a decent mic, and a pop filter. I’ll get on it soon! And I hear the pause there…good point.
Hey there! Would love some critique on this attempt:
How do you win at business? Stay at La Quinta, where we’re changing with stylish makeovers. Then, at your next meeting, set your seat height to its maximum level. Bravo, tall meeting man! Start winning today; book now at LQ.com.Steve: Great voice for this! I do agree with Kevin on that choppy part at :09, but you played the choppiness perfectly, imo, at :19 on “Now it’s time for me…to bring you…up to speed…”
I like the list of 3 at the beginning! Your inflection after the third word is very soothing. Great read!
Hi KBridges! One of the things I’m working on is lists. I agree with Mary here, that the last list of 5 (grow, play…) needs more tonal variety. See how you can play with different inflections on those. Love your voice!
Hi Mary! I think bumping up the pace in areas will help it sound more conversational, rather than a bit methodical. Maybe practice by speaking these lines to your dog, or pretend that the audience is a teenager. That will take some of the stiffness out. I think your best line is definitely: When it comes to breaking this lethal habit, the most effective tool is willpower. That one sounds natural! Hope that helps! 🙂
That was fantastic, and a big jump in warmth in relation to AMEX. That was the first time I heard both, and I listened to AMEX first. Put that same warmth and tone from the new read into the AMEX, and you’ve got two winners! I especially liked how you worked with list items and varied your tone (consisting of water % and collagen %)–it’s an area that I’m working on now. Great read!
