[M]

Hi Talia. Great job on both! You have a fresh, youthful voice that naturally evokes playfulness – very refreshing! For these serious reads, maybe consider taking the bounce out slightly to add to the serious/business quality that might be sought. Look forward to some upbeat commercial reads from you as well!

[M]

Hi BJ. Professional reads on both as far as this novice can tell! Very confident. Appropriate tone. Engaging. Not a ton to critique, so these comments might fall into the category of personal preference and/or nit picky. Regarding Asthma: I felt a longer pause between the end of the sentence containing “health” and the start of the following sentence beginning with “They’ll…” would give it a bit more space. Also, I heard some breaths that interrupted the flow of the sentence (e.g., “learn more about asthma (breath) is to…” “Visit the allergy (breath) and asthma foundation” and “AAF (breath) dot o r g.” Regarding TJ: great energy. I thought you easily have the skill to maintain that crucial energy while slowing it down just a tad. Impressive!

[M]

Hi Luke! Nice job. My suggestion for Quality Inn would be to lighten the tone a little – more upbeat – and perhaps insert an overly emphasized formality to the name “Mr. Simons” to contrast with the casual “Bob”

Good job!

[M]

Hello T! Great job! I too recently posted my first read and felt all of the vulnerability that step brought on! I heard a nice smooth, controlled voice with a good pace for this type of read. Maybe add a tad bit more emphasis to the words “inspired,” “danger,”conflict and “struggle.” They have a built in meaning that allows for a strong delivery. The last word “here” conveys the impression that you are continuing speaking – maybe a falling intonation would suggest that you are actually pointing at the picture…? Just some thoughts, but a really great job!! High-five to the Firsters; we deserve a “10!”

[M]

Great job! Engaging, energetic but still natural. Nice variety of intonations. To me the word “camera” has a different accent than the rest of the piece. Along those lines but having more to do with the rising intonation, “seven” and the final “Google” could be spoken perhaps with more solid confidence. Excellent read! Look forward to hearing the other.

[M]

Nice. Good energy. Good tone. Maybe consider mixing up the rhythm and intonation in the middle; the emphasis on “never” “been” “cereal” and “like” feels to me a little too predictable, but that could be just a personal preference for me and is definitely minor.

[M]

I completely agree! Thanks so much!

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I was engaged an interested in the material. I liked the elongated connection bt “izzforthe moment;” the articulation of “cosmic perspective;” and the subtle and gentle “soft meadow.”
a few words I thought might need attention (perhaps slowed down?) – “nitrogen,” “certainty” and “accumulated”. lovely voice

[M]

My favorite line “Nike Dunk High Up” with your low register and falling intonation – irony and subtle humor at its best. I would slow down both reads to accentuate and give credit to your voice and also give you time to articulate beginnings and ends of words. that was a pleasure to hear.

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