[Mark.OD]

Good morning. Three very strong reads. I love the playfulness, especially of the trombone, on the first one. The tone for a young audience is perfect. I thought the second read was very fast. The Mr. Rogers piece was very sweet. It hit the right tone without being cloying. Throughout the reads, your diction was impeccable. The recording quality seemed a bit thin to this technically challenged ear. Nice job!

[Mark.OD]

The Gomorrah piece VO is very effective. Pace and tone were perfect. The music overpowered the spot somewhat. Effective pacing on the hockey spots, especially the first one, but again I thought the background was a bit overpowering/ distracting. Nice variation in VO between the two pieces.

[Mark.OD]

Caryn, you have a great natural style. I heard a person talking to me, not a VO artist. Trust that. Some minor slurring (and I noticed “cofidently” as well), but overall solid reads.

[Mark.OD]

I liked the variation of tone among the three pieces. My coach is trying to get me to use silence less when transitioning. He would like to hear tonal change instead. That said, there were a couple of places in the reads that might be smoother with this in mind. Great energy and diction! You use your very peasant voice appropriately for the each topic.

[Mark.OD]

I thought you handle a challenging script adeptly. I agree with Steve that you could slow down a little bit. The one thing I wonder, however, is how you feel about Newton’s accomplishments. I think a little bit more “you” could help. Nice job.

[Mark.OD]

Very nice job. The pacing is excellent and the delivery quite natural. The only criticism is with the word disability, which was a little awkward. I only mention this because its the title of the company. Other than that, great job.

[Mark.OD]

I thought the first one was excellent in it’s authenticity. The pace was quite effective as well. I thought the second was not quite as authentic, it was a little “acty”, if I may coin that word. Your voice is perfect for both pieces and the sound quality rocks.

[Mark.OD]

I would love to get some feedback on these pieces. Just started the narration track and am working to find that authentic voice while considering varying audiences.
(Also, it’s my first upload and I hope I did this correctly. Any help is appreciated)
Thanks.

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[Mark.OD]

All three are filled with taste sensory images. Use those. Bring up those flavors in your mind. Maybe a close friend who likes food could be your intended audience. Hope this helps.

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