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Really enjoyed the B****r Creek Audio Tour. Nice friendly delivery, you sounded natural and knowledgeable. Your delivery was clear and pacing was very good.
Depreciation was again natural and knowledgeable. You conveyed some very complex concepts in a understandable tone. There were some very complex concepts and words but you flowed very smoothly. You made it easy to understand. Nice Job.
The Nat Geo – glad you got on the level of the kids in your delivery of the yucks and stuff. Suggestion… Maybe then you can then put on the teacher hat on the deeper parts of the explanation like how the plastic and chemicals stay around forever are not like an a apple. I know that may be clear as mud.
Sears had a natural conversational delivery. Believed you found a good DuPont carpet and wanted to share the experience.
Knott-Berry has good energy but was choppy and a bit unnatural. Really like the energy about the roller-coaster but not sure about the delivery of the word “down”. When I ride the roller coaster, for me the climb is the scary anticipation, then can’t get off, got to go “down” which is both scary and thrilling. Suggestion: for fun I would try an extreme read version like you are actually on the roller coaster and see how you can bring the audience along on the ride. I would tie the fireworks display and fourth of July celebration into one sentence. The holiday almost sounded like an afterthought with the pause.
Risewell had great energy and conversational like you were talking to your health-conscious friend. The pace was good for the piece.
Maybelline pace was too fast for me. I missed the luxurious and seductive feeling of the script. I would try a flirtier approach and intentionally try to draw in the listener like a good kiss. Just a different approach.
7-11 made me laugh, you punch the punch lines. Nice job. Question in the script… Was it one “three-alarm fire” … or three separate alarm fires. That made me stop when listening.
The Boys and Girls club – the first line that “piece of paper” in the hands of a child is more powerful than a gun or knife. That is incredibly visual. It is a golden ticket that can change someone’s life. I would try to bring that relevance and importance. It may help to bring a bit more seriousness to the piece.
The Pizza Hut energy was definitely geared to the kids in the script, but the adults pay and purchase the pizza so maybe speak to the parent then use the kid and that energy to try to drive the sale. Just a different approach. Hope that helps.
Have you flown first class – it is so radically different from coach. For giggles image you were cramped in coach for three hours and then the stewardess said you were upgraded to first class on your connecting flight it may help the listener feel the difference you are conveying. Just a thought.
Nice read. Realistic and conversational until the last two sentences. A bit too much enthusiasm for the tone set at the beginning of the read. I would try to up the pace a bit.
LOL…the men in the white coats know my address well! I really appreciate the tip. It was so much fun to just get silly.
Hey VO Gang,
So I noticed myself getting a bit uptight behind the mic. Maybe a bit of performance anxiety. So I recorded a character voice first to work out the nerves. Then did my best to make it as real and conversational as possible. Let me know what you think. All feedback is appreciated.
You have a nice clear almost authoritative sound to your voice. All three takes sounded more like you were reading, some of the sentences were choppy at the end like the last few words seemed to catch you off guard instead of a complete thought. Relax, have fun and tell us a story. Love the tone of your voice.
