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Hi Logan! Thanks for the feedback on my read:). Great to hear you! I love the tone/timbre of your voice. I think if the goal is a natural delivery, you may want to speak with a bit more fluidity/connective tissue between words. There are several places where the delivery seemed a bit choppy.
Wow! There is so much great stuff happening here! I also love the pacing and the space between phrases. …”the true story of [space] Algona”… so good:). I have one observation and it may not even be a bad thing, but I notice that your ends of phrases tend to finish at approximately the same pitch. There’s great variety in the beginnings and middle sections of your phrases, particularly “and put to work in farms and factories and even in private homes..”
What a resonant and beautiful instrument! Two things, given that you have a read both for a late night jazz radio station and for Goodnight Moon, I immediately thought of my own experience teaching jazz to very young children. We used to sing the text of Goodnight Moon to the tune of Naima by John Coltrane. Maybe try speaking the text while listening to that recording and see what, if anything, it does to change the pacing and/or melodic delivery? I also think there may be opportunities to create more interest in the list of things that the author is saying goodnight to. The word “goodnight” is repeated over and over which makes the things being said “goodnight” TO inherently more interesting. Perhaps try stretching out some of the text and adding a bit more space between the “goodnights?” Great work!
Dear Forum, any feedback on my video game internet script would be much appreciated!
“As I’m sitting here on this Main Menu looking at this beautiful artwork, I’m just thinking about how far the video game industry has come. And a lot of you guys know this, but the Legend of Zelda is hands down – by far – my most favorite and treasured video game franchise of all time. And it’s probably because it’s the very first video game I ever played… It kind of set me on my path to being a gamer.”
Hi! Wow, great tone! I wonder what it would feel like if you emphasized “better” and “down”? Is that what makes this thrill ride unique? I love the levity in the middle and mood at the end:)
Hello again! Thanks as always for your time and ears for listening!
Video Game Commentary – “Legend of Zelda Breath of the Wild”
As I’m sitting here on this Main Menu looking at this beautiful artwork, I’m just thinking about how far the video game industry has come. And a lot of you guys know this, but the Legend of Zelda is hands down – by far – my most favorite and treasured video game franchise of all time. And it’s probably because it’s the very first video game I ever played. It kind of set me on my path to being a gamer.EDIT: Files were silent. Should be fixed!… sorry! Also, now included are the scripts.
Hello again, everyone! Thanks so much for the comments on my previous post. I have curated several options for my demo and am including some practice I did on them today. I would so appreciate any feedback you could provide on these reads.
Cool, Cool (original)
Who’s that hiding behind the piano? Is it a dog, a mouse, a giraffe, or a cow? Cowabunga! You figured it out! Waaa, waaa, waaa, waaa (sad trombone). Try again.Cod Heads (from Smithsonian magazine)
Pay a winter visit to Norway’s remote Lofoten Islands and it’s impossible to miss the rows of headless fish carcasses hanging from wooden racks to dry. Groups of kids with sharp knives and b****y smocks stood waiting for more cod heads to arrive. The job makes selling Girl Scout cookies or running a lemonade stand look like child’s play.Rogers (from Documentary synopsis)
He gave us the most precious gift of all: the courage to be kind. Won’t You Be My Neighbor? reflects on Fred Rogers’ legacy of kindness, and the profound and lasting effect his innovative approach to television had on millions of children.Hello again, everyone! Thanks so much for the comments on my previous post. I have curated several options for my demo and am including some practice I did on them today. I would so appreciate any feedback you could provide on these reads.
Hello all! I am brand new to this forum. I started with Edge webinars this month and just had my first coaching session with James Andrews (great!). I have invested time in crafting my home studio space and welcome any feedback about the recording quality in addition to the read. Thank you for your time and consideration! Here is the copy:
Nature’s Recyclers – Discovery Kids (sourced from the Edge Script library)
Did you know that mold and bacteria and higher level organisms like beetles, centipedes and, of course, earthworms are all busy recyclers? By breaking down organic matter – stuff like dead plants, p**p, and decaying animals – they create valuable nutrients necessary for rich and fertile soil. Take it from me, a worm who know, we are doing you a big favor.
