[kfvoice]

Okay, I did something different for tonight. It’s definitely narration, but I channeled my inner Rachel Ray for this totally off-the-cuff ad-lib for a real cocktail recipe. Hey, it’s the New Year! 🙂

So this might be more on air improv, and I broke all the VO rules, but hey… it was fun. Let me know what you think!

I have included the original draft script I put together, too, so you can see just how much the audio compares to the original script. I actually skipped a step, and I was bummed, but it allowed me to figure out how to copy and paste in Audacity! Yay!

I am (now) aware I said ‘orange liquor’ instead of ‘orange liqueur’. I can edit that, now that I know how to. 🙂 I also dipped down on the very last word of the last sentence, too. Unlike other parts of the read, I did not plan that, lol — but I was not doing it over! If you are curious, this was my third take, but first take of the entire script. I messed up in the very beginning on the first couple of tries.

Thank you for any feedback! Happy New Year! Cheers!

Kathy

French 75 Tutorial

Happy New Year!

Let’s celebrate with a classic cocktail — the French 75!

Here’s how to make it:

The first thing you are going to do is add one ounce of gin into your shaker … followed by half an ounce of simple syrup … and three-quarter ounce lemon juice.

Add some ice, and shake well … now fine strain into a flute … slowly top off with Champaign … and finally garnish with a lemon twist … and that’s how you make a French 75!

Another version is to substitute the Champaign with sparkling wine. Whatever floats your bubbles…

Cheers, my friends!

Here’s to new beginnings…

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[kfvoice]

Good job, Mary! Your “for’s” were enunciated clearly on my end. I heard a minor “tah” in It’s gear that’s built to help you get more outdoors for your money. But, I completely understand the struggle…

Kathy

[kfvoice]

Hi Katelyn!

Nice warm tone, and change in pitch variation. Pacing was good too. I did catch a couple of spots where you paused for effect not in the script, but overall this was a good read!

Kathy

[kfvoice]

Hi Katelyn!

Thanks for the feedback! That will be my first upload in the New Year! 🙂

Kathy

[kfvoice]

Thanks, Mary!

Your points make sense. I’ll work on varying my tone in that sentence, as well as emphasizing “carefully”.

Thanks again!

Kathy

[kfvoice]

Hello voice fellows!

I’ve got another commercial read I put together for you. Felt like trying something different again, besides narration, for practice.

I am prepared to be critiqued on the clarity and enunciation. (I said ‘hundred as opposed to one hundred — not that I was trying to imitate a Mainer, it just happened, and I decided to leave it in.)

Let me know what you think! Thanks again!

Kathy

Poland Spring Brand Natural Spring Water

A lot has changed since we got our start back in 1845, but we’re still sourced from our carefully selected springs.

Celebrating 175 years. Poland Spring Brand Natural Spring Water. From the Heart of Maine.

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[kfvoice]

Hi Mary!

Nice read! The pacing was good, but I wasn’t hearing the “smile” in your voice with the read. I believe this would show the enthusiasm and love you have for Chewy. I hope this is helpful.

Kathy

[kfvoice]

I really liked your delivery for the read. The tone and pacing were good, as well.

I agree with Mary about emphasizing the words “work” and “home” a little more. Overall, good job!

Kathy

[kfvoice]

I went to post this the other week, and it wouldn’t let me, so I here it is. I hope you see it!

Overall, these were good reads, danvasq!

Here is my feedback. These are minor, but it could cost you from landing a job.

Script 1: In the second paragraph/part of the script, it doesn’t sound like it flows well together. I hear “blips” between some sentences. Is this from editing? And, at the :46-47 mark, with the sentence, “You probably are already pretty familiar with the verse.“, you skip the word “pretty”. At the :55 mark, you say “arts”, as opposed to art, and then at 1:08, you skipped “of” in the sentence “And like all of his creations.” Be mindful of skipping words when reading, and sticking to the script. I would try varying your pitch just a little more on this list: the art, the verse, the design, the colors.

Script 2: Like Mary mentioned, you need to edit out that pause and deep breath (“flood. The vat…”) right before you read your last sentence. Otherwise, I am not sure if you intended to or not, but I would say good judgement in deciding not to pause after some of the commas in your last sentence. If you have taken the webinar “The Science of Speaking Like a Pro”, then you know it isn’t always necessary. This works, and if you haven’t done so already, try different reads to see what sounds best to you.

Script 3: Slight background noise. Easily fixed in editing for noise reduction.

These are just my thoughts. I hope this helps!

Good luck with the demo!

Kathy

[kfvoice]

Thanks, Mary! Noted!

I wasn’t sure if my pitch varied enough in the read, but I am glad to know that it had an “upbeat” sound.

Thanks again!

Kathy

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