[kfvoice]

Thanks, Robert! I am glad to hear that there was definite improvement!

Kathy

[kfvoice]

Thanks for the feedback, Mary! I will practice “175”.

Kathy

[kfvoice]

Okay folks, based on feedback, here is a redo of a script I had done just before the new year. Let me know if it’s improved (from the flat tone). I have attached both files. The first is the original, and the second is the one I re-recorded tonight.

Thanks again!

Kathy

Poland Spring (Brand)

A lot has changed since we got our start back in 1845, but we’re still sourced from our carefully selected springs.

Celebrating 175 years. Poland Spring Brand Natural Spring Water. From the Heart of Maine.

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[kfvoice]

Hi Mary — The pacing was good, and I felt you emphasized words or changed your tone where needed. I do agree with Robert that it needs a more relaxed, and conversational delivery. Additionally, I know you are still recording on your phone, and I don’t usually hear this from you, but be mindful of sounding breathy between sentences (the very last one).

Keep it up!

Kathy

[kfvoice]

Hi John — This is really good! Sounded ready to go as a narration for an A&E special to me. Keep it up!

Kathy

[kfvoice]

To clarify — it “sounded” like your smile faded towards the end, not necessarily the volume. Does that make sense?

Kathy

[kfvoice]

Good job, Mary!

I could hear the smile, but it seemed to fad a bit with the last two sentences. Otherwise, it had a good pace, and pitch variations. Keep it up!

Kathy

[kfvoice]

Hello Matthew! Nice job! Your tone fits both scripts very well. Clear reads, and good pitch variation in each. Keep it up! — Kathy

[kfvoice]

monibr16 — nice job on the lead in! With that said, to add on to what Mary mentioned, your lead in was lacking enthusiasm. Sound more excited with “Oh, Trendi.com”, as that is what you are promoting, so it needs to stand out — you did a great job with this at the end (where your smile was evident).

Overall, good read! Keep it up!

Kathy

[kfvoice]

Much better, Robert! Nice improvement!

To me, it sounded like there should of been more of a break between the first and second sentences. Were you further away from the mic in the second read, or was the volume lower?

Good job!

Kathy

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