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Hi there. Here is a narration script. any feedback is appreciated 🙂
Born in Seattle, Washington, on October 28, 1955, William Henry Gates III is the only son of the three children of Mary and William Henry Gates, Jr.
A bright and active child, Bill began cutting classes to hang out at all hours at his private school‘s computer center.
When he was only 16, he and friend Paul Allen sold their computer-run system to monitor highway traffic and reportedly earned $20,000 –
but business fell off when customers found out that the entrepreneurs were still in high school.Hi Briane, you have a lovely voice for this kind of copy! I notice the breath and popping you mentioned, what is your set up? are you by chance using a noise gate? These can cause problems if the settings are not set to have a more natural setting. Noise gate is similar to noise reduction. Anyways, I’m a bit of a tech/editing geek so I’m just curious 🙂
Danggg girl this is so nice! I love your voice it is so smooth and this felt so natural. I really liked it. I also relate because I have anxiety so it spoke to me. My bits of things to work on would be, the first word “I’ve” I had to replay a few times because I did not understand it. I thought maybe it was “eyes”, so that first word could be spoken a bit more clearly. I thought the call to action could have had a beat right before it. My little brain couldn’t quite keep up at that point. All in all a very nice read. I’d love to hear more from you.
Hey! Thanks for the feedback you guys. Listening back I hear the choppiness and I think it is that I did not cut out the breaks between sentences enough (this is where I stop and breathe haha!) Although, my coach mentioned that it is really more of a big deal to edit breaths out in commercial reads vs narration as narration is supposed to sound more natural and people do breathe. Although if the breath is insanely distracting it should be brought down in volume. Just thought I’d mention that as well. Thanks you guys!
Hi there! I like your passion and zest for this copy. I can feel your emotion and how you want the viewer to feel. I listened to the Nero read. And yes – what a great class the science of speaking like a pro was! I think you really sped through the read and it would be great to hear a version where you slow down and take your time. Allow us to absorb each statement you are making. My coach was saying with narration you need to see what the viewer is seeing while you are speaking as they will be watching something on screen. So I think pace it out a little slower and breathe, but your emotion and passion is awesome!! Keep up the great work! 🙂
Good morning everyone. I’m trying to apply what I learned in speaking with a pro and all that I have been learning for narration. It is a LOT to think about while still trying to sound natural 🙂 I’m naturally a very enthusiastic and friendly reader, so I’m not sure how this fits with a “documentary read”. I know this might not be something I actually book in the real world. Any feedback is appreciated. Take care!
Katelyn
“For more than three decades, mankind has explored the mysteries of the universe from
a vantage point in space. Now we‘re turning space into a practical place to work. By the year 2020, NASA‘s space station is scheduled to give science a permanent platform in orbit. A place where researchers can examine our world from a unique perspective, and experiment under conditions of extreme temperature and weightlessness. In zero gravity, compounds can react in ways not possible here on Earth. Scientists can create better med- icines, more durable plastics, and stronger alloys made of metals that resist mixing under gravity‘s pull.”Thank you for the feedback! Totally right Mary, that number can be shortened up. Yes I sometimes do not include the script because sometimes it is nice to just hear the read straight up.
good evening. I have just started my narration training so I’m thinking about doing a read for Banff National Park. I’m trying to visualize what I see while I’m seeing it and I’m also tackling a MAJOR challenge with this crazy CRAZY long longgggg list haha! come at me with any feedback.
Lovely beautiful voice! I am excited to see what you will do. Congrats on starting your commercial demo!! Here is what stood out to me besides the beautiful timbre of your voice and how charming of a vibe you have – I think you hit the word “this” in “put THIS card” but I think you might want to emphasize the word “hands” and “child”. And I think you could create a bit more gravity in your tone for the first half. It feels very upbeat but the subject matter could do well to have more of an emotional gravity to it. I think from “to learn how…” I think you really handle it well! nice work.
