[jwreickel]

Hey all!

Uploading a few more scripts as part of my homework! Any feedback would be appreciated!

Jimmy

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[jwreickel]

Good afternoon Steve,

Thanks for sharing! I would upload each file separately so it’s easier to listen to specific portions or to repeat a single read and I’ve copied some feedback about each script below as it sounded to me.

Thanks!

Jimmy

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Advance Technologies

Well paced but I feel like you sped up a little in the ‘This software is designed to offer you accurate informaiton about company policies and procedures’ part. I would also try to make the ‘your job is important to us’ especially soothing and reassuring

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Educational Explainer- Real Estate

This was my favorite of the three, I thought this was much more conversational than the first one, and I like the emphasis on MAYBE like is in the script.

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Financial Engines

Maybe a little fast, especially near the end.

[jwreickel]

Hey Erik!

You have a very soothing, professional sounding tone which is consistent across all three reads. Your articulation is also very nice and each word sounds very clear.

I’ve copied some feedback about each pieces below as it sounded to me, hope this helps!

Jimmy

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Ethan Allen
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It does sound like you’re reading and I think part of that is every sentence ends on a ‘down’ tone except the question (How can we ensure that Ethan Allen’s true colors shine through?). This makes it seems a little less conversational to me. I might also add a little more space between sentences.

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The Maya
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Better spacing between sentences, I feel like a little more emphasis on word/phrases like ‘violent apocalypse’ and ‘rare galactic alignment’ might make listeners a little more engaged.

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Georgia O’Keeffe
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Loved the line ‘in her magnified paintings of flowers, meant to convey that Nature, in all its beauty, was as powerful…’ This was my favorite of your three examples.

[jwreickel]

Forgot to attach the scripts!

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When it comes to woodworking for beginners, there are 6 things that are essential to know for how to start creating projects.

Once you’ve got a handle on these lessons, you can start to explore more advanced pieces and techniques.

I’m going to discuss each of these tips, so you can get to the fun part and actually start to work with wood!

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Fantasy Sports is estimated to be a four billion dollar industry that boasts over 30 million participants and leagues for every sport imaginable.

But for all this success, the story of the game’s inception is little known (UP). The modern fantasy leagues can be traced back to a group of writers and academics who met at La Rotisserie Francaise in New York City to form a baseball league of their own.

The game quickly grew in popularity, and with the growing use and attractiveness of the Internet, the “founding fathers” never foresaw how their creation would take off and ultimately leave them behind.

[jwreickel]

Good afternoon everyone!

I’m starting my training and attached two reads! I’d definitely appreciate any feedback.

Thanks!

Jimmy

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