[Jhern245]

https://recorder.google.com/f527ecc5-fd72-4861-b0a4-876a18e4d0f0

Hopefully this works because I can’t seem to download an mp3.

[Jhern245]

Hi I’m looking for creative feedback. It’s my first time trying commercial. What advice do you have to sound more conversational? Does the tone and paste match the product? Thanks!

[Jhern245]

The AMC one is lengthy so feel free to stope listening after the first 20 seconds.

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Hi Emily. I liked the take but I do feel like there may have been an added pause “and, in a short time”. I like the personality in the ending.

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Hi Dillon. In the Toronto one I think the beginning and end sound like the works kind of run together. I think the end first phrase and the list at the end could use just a little more time to be heard completely.

[Jhern245]

Hello everyone. This is my first of likely many requests for feedback. I would like to request creative feedback only since I am not currently recording out if a studio. This is an AMC theater intro bumper and a documentary description. My issues are rushing and sometimes not fully pronouncing things like the word “to” and saying “tah”. Thanks in advance!

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