[hsturgis]

I really like this one too, your tone is much deeper and the general mood is much more serious. Your pitch is good and I think matches what this sort of spot would call for. Only thing is that towards the end with the call to action it feels a little rushed and like we’re missing a word there. But great job!

[hsturgis]

This feels really conversational, in the best way! I feel like you are really painting the picture of what the commercial would look like. And I think pacing and tone were appropriate as well.

[hsturgis]

Hi everyone! I don’t have an at home studio but would love any and all constructive feedback on these two spots I’ve been practicing– mainly about my tone, diction and pacing! They are fairly contrasting. Thanks!

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