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Hi there! You have a very pleasant voice, but I’m sure you know that already!
On Beginning of first read, “Did you” comes out as “didju” – I particularly notice this because it’s something I have to watch in myself. Overall, you’re a WORM, so I want to hear more fun and/or irreverence in your voice – just the attitude.
The second read sounds forced, like you are really focusing on each syllable of each word. I suggest just reading it to yourself several times and become completely familiar/comfortable with the text, and then make it really smooth and natural – like your natural voice.
Great work!
Hey Brother – Great voice!
Amex was almost perfect! The ONLY thing I heard was that the first “American” sounded to me like “AmURRican”. Excellent!
On Kathryn Knight, I feel like the read needs smoothed out – it’s kind of choppy (the number one criticism I get). Also, “undeniably” came out as “un-de-niably” – I think there was too much emphasis on that particular word.
The sales training read seems rushed and not as well enunciated. I heard “tothepotential”; “new info along the way” feels bouncy to me; and “entrpreneurs” doesn’t sound right to me.
I can definitely see why you’re getting into this business. Would appreciate return feedback from you.
Hello Sarania – what a bright voice you have! On Old Navy, when you say “percent off”, it sounds like “percen toff”. Listen to yourself saying it with a soft “d” sound or dropping the “t” altogether and see what you think.
On Sesame Places, I agree with Chloe’s suggestion for varying “Sesame”, but otherwise think its great – your voice is PERFECT for that spot!
I understand what you are shooting for in Snapple, but it sounds very mechanical – sometimes almost forced. I think Chloe’s suggestion is excellent that you visualize speaking into the phone at the back.
Great job!
Random thoughts on making it sound more natural:
More casual on “choose dinner”; no break between “more” and “pre-portioned”; When saying “delivered to your door”, be thinking “Cool!”; I would have a higher pitch on “less mess” than on “less stress” – will provide more contrast to “no promises”…
“And who doesn’t love that” all runs together; Change your emphasis from “PLUS” to “free shipping” at end. Hope something here is helpful!Hi Laura! Very pleasing voice and good enunciation. Just listen to yourself and try to smooth out your read; right now, it sounds like you’re reading. Good job!
Happy Wednesday VO Fam! Just practicing and would appreciate some feedback, on performance and sound levels etc. Have a great day and THANKS!
Hi Joseph. I really like your voice and pace – just a couple of thoughts:
On Dublin,
I especially like “ever burgeoning” – not easy to say clearly.
I would pause after “home to great writers” and before “like”.
You really emphasize “and” a couple of times, and in my opinion, they should be de-emphasized.
On Alaska, “this official” runs together a little bit.
I’m not feeling an excitement to go like I want to feel when listening to your invitation. It might even be enough to really emphasize planning a trip to “ALASKA”; that’s exciting!!!
You got this!
Hi Arin! I think your pace is excellent and your voice very natural. My constructive criticism is that I feel like you used a comma instead of a period after “back in time” and I would suggest that “Look forward” be more of an affirmative statement and having your voice drop on “travel back”, rather than rise up. Have a Blessed day!
