Tina
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Great energy on this read. A suggestion would be to try it with a bit more wonder and slow done a touch at the beginning to really set up the visuals that you are painting. You have a great voice!
Hi Tiffany!
Great reads! Nice clarity. The only thing I noticed on the first read is the consonant on “child” was lost, and that’s a word I lose it on, so just make sure you get that sound in. Other than that it sounded great!
Nice energy in the second read. Great read with enthusiasm and you can definitely tell that your audience is meant to be young. I think this might just be personal preference, but if you say “uh” instead of “ay” when you list the things I think it might punch up the object more and put less focus on the A. Ex. “A pencil, a car, a horse, etc.” Maybe try it once that way and see how it feels to you and see if you know what I mean? I hope this is helpful!
Have a great day!
Tina
Hi Guys!
I tried a script for a virtual tour! Thanks for any feedback. 🙂
Welcome to Morton Arboretum, home to more than 36 HUNDRED native trees, shrubs, and plants. This virtual guide provides a snapshot of what to expect when you visit our Wheaton, Illinois location. First, let’s look at how to get the most from your virtual tour. See the 5 Main tabs across the top of your screen–Introduction, Trees, Shrubs, Plants, and Frequently Asked Questions? The “Introduction” tab is highlighted because your tour automatically started here when you clicked the “Enter” button on the home page. Use your mouse to click on a different Key page. Each Key page lists subcategories in its left pane. Hover your mouse over each subcategory to view a drop-down menu, then click the subtopic you want. Use the black scroll bar to navigate subcategories. Use the white scroll bar at the right of your screen to navigate each Main page. Now let’s continue.
Hi Mary,
Great job with the music! I think on the first piece you could probably let it breather a little bit more. Even a cool thing to think about would be to insert some cool jazz in between the talking, like when you say “it is an improvised art” it would be cool to hear a small improvised trill from a sax, or skat or something. I totally pictured you reading this on that Sunday morning news show. I think it’s CBD sunday morning. 🙂
My suggestion for your second piece on Fats Waller is to go through the script and pick words that you want to emphasize. There are so many good adjectives, and descriptors in this piece and I feel like you can punch it up more and add a little bit more intrigue to the read. Hope this helps! Also a lot of moments that you could add music to emphasize what you are saying such as “furious burst of energy”. Overall, great reads and I think just adding a few touches to them to ignite them will totally make them epic.
You have a great voice for this read. My first suggestion is to visualize the different car parts that you are speaking about and pretend that you are showing them to somebody and maybe running your hand along them, just to connect more with each individual part. The second suggestion is to notice the way you say “The last thing you’ll need” because the way it sounds right now to me is as if it’s a hassle and the last thing you need is a hassle, instead of a list that is finishing off with “The last thing you need is the road”. More like anticipatory excitement rather than something that comes off as a headache. I hope that makes sense.
Here’s a practice script I tried. Thanks for any feedback!
Like many other philosophers, who greatly extended our knowledge of nature, Galileo had a remarkable aptitude for the invention of instruments designed for philosophical research. To facilitate his practical work, we find that in 1599, he had engaged a skilled workman, who was to live in his house, and be constantly at hand to try the devices, which were forever springing from Galileo’s fertile brain.
Great reads! I can definitely picture what you described in regards to the man staring at the tv. I think it would be cool to blend both of your reads and start a little slower with the first line and really punch up the ” 82” Samsung QLED TV, and then more conversational and slightly faster pace with the rest. I love the quirkiness of this script and I totally thought this is something William Shatner would be suited to read as he has that sarcastic wit. Hopefully this is helpful. haha.
