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Hello everybody. Below is a commercial practice read I worked on. Please feel free to provide feedback on performance and recording quality.
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Hi Andres,
I listened to your read, and I thought it was good. The tone and pacing of the read are solid. Also you differentiate between sentences nicely. The only suggestion I have is slowing down, “hello and welcome”. Also may I suggest next time you post on the forum, include the copy of the read. It allows listeners to better analyze your performance, and provide more helpful feedback.
Hi Mr. Smith,
I checked out your reads, and wanted to provide my feedback.
Human Society – Good tone and good pacing. I noticed upspeak at the end of the first and second sentence, watch out for that. Also maybe add a bit of differentiation b/w abandoned, some sick or injured.
Machine Learning – good tone and good pacing, but it sounded slighly robotic. Also watch out for the glottal between “nature and”.
Zellers – good differentiation b/w men, kid’s and ladies. But the read could have used a little more pep. Imagine if Crazy Eddie did this read. You don’t have to be that over the top, but just give the read a bit more excitement.
Overall good job.
Hello everybody. Attached are three Narration reads for my latest homework assignment. I would appreciate any feedback in regards to the performances and recording quality. Thank you for taking the time to listen.
Ethan Allen
Fashion you relish. Quality you expect. Service you can depend on. Furnishings you can afford. Choices galore. This is the colorful image of Ethan Allen we want consumers to know. The wide spectrum of our image is expressed in many ways: through our galleries, our advertising, and our team of professionals who represent Ethan Allen. But is our image clearly visible to consumers? How can we ensure that Ethan Allen’s true colors shine through? Building a strong image that withstands the test of time takes imagination, innovation, and participation. Those who have succeeded in maintaining a colorful, appealing image have followed a simple rule.
The Maya
The Maya, an ancient South American culture, predicted that time would end in a violent apocalypse on December 21, 2012. They created an elaborate astronomical calendar called “The Long Count,” which stops abruptly in 2012. This date, which is also the winter equinox, coincides with an incredibly rare galactic alignment that happens once every 26,000 years. What did the Mayans think would happen when their calendar ended? And were they joined by other cultures–from different parts of the world and in different centuries–all pointing to 2012 as a calamitous end time?
Georgia O’Keeffe
Georgia O’Keeffe revolutionized modern art, both in her time and in the present. And if we understand O’Keeffe’s emotional response to nature and her need to create an equivalent in art, we hold the key to her work. In the 1920s she explored this theme in her magnified paintings of flowers, meant to convey that Nature, in all its beauty, was as powerful as the widespread industrialization of the period. After spending her first summer in New Mexico, she began to paint the colorful yet barren landscape, expansive skies and bleached bones that would capture her imagination, and her heart, for the rest of her life.
Hi Dillon,
The tempo for both reads sounds rushed, slow it down a bit. Also dig the enthusiasm. Good job.
Hi Sylvanie,
I checked out your reads, and here are my thoughts.
Social Security – good pace to the read. Watch out for the glottal stop b/w Administration and in the third sentence. You hit the key words nicely. You sounded a little tense/rigid in this read. Imagine you are talking to somebody to help the read sound more fluid.
Top of the Rock Observation Deck – good tone, good voice, you hit key words nicely. This read sounds great. Very good job.
Hi Jay,
I listened to your reads, I’ll share with you my thoughts.
Tesla – great voice, good tempo. I agree with Notetaker, sometimes it sound like you’re reading word for word. Overall good job.
Cosmic Narration – great tempo and great tone. This read is great. Awesome job.
Bud Grant – b/w year and winning the pause seems short. Overall good job.
Hi Colton,
I listened to your reads, I’ll share with you my thoughts.
Hooked on Phonics – good tone, tempos is a little fast, slow it down a bit.
Jack Daniels – good tempo, maybe drop the accent, use your natural voice. You hit the key words nicely.
Overall good job.
Hi Evette,
I really like your voice. I checked out your reads, and wanted to share my notes with you.
Word of Mouth News – great playful tone, good pacing. This read put a big smile on my face. Great job.
Rachel – good tone, good pacing. Maybe give a little more umph to “hot dogs” and “all summer long”. But overall good job.
Hi Notetaker 32,
I checked out your reads, and wanted to share my notes with you.
Ionizing Radiation – very good tone, watch out for the glottal stop b/w “radiation and”.
Explainer Video for Website – good tone. The second question/sentence sounds a bit rigid/robotic. Also watch out for the glottal b/w “Performance and Predictability”.
Overall solid job.
