[Eliz_10]

Hi Jeff Guerette,
Just listened and enjoyed your Home Depot submission. It was really well paced and delivered with an appropriate amount of “selling” emotion. The only thing I noticed in the first sentence was that the word “replaced” is missing the “d” at the end of the word. Other than that, well done!

Elizabeth

[Eliz_10]

Hello Mkell755,

Enjoyed listening to your Sears carpet commercial. Your tone of voice and delivery are very smooth and soothing to the ear. I think you emphasized all the right words and gave a convincing reason to shop at Sears.

Keep up the good work.
Elizabeth

[Eliz_10]

Hi,
I’m submitting another holiday “character” demo and asking for comments from the group. This is supposed to be humorous and involves Mrs. Claus talking about Santa and making a request of the children Santa visits.

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[Eliz_10]

Hi Danvasq4030,
I have just a few comments on each of your entries. I really like the warm tone of your voice and pacing. I think you could convey more incredulousness in the first half (before the comma) of the first line of Motel 6. There is a small noise just before the word “save” in the second sentence. In the American Cancer Society commercial, could you dampen down the “th” sound at the end of the word “health”? Since adjectives our are friend and add color to a line, you might want to emphasize, a bit more, the word “lethal” in the second sentence. In the Wall Street Journal piece, there is a small noise at the beginning of the second sentence that begins with “To .” The word information in the third sentence that begins “The journal gives me all the business information…..” the word “information” is sort of fuzzy in the middle. Also, that sentence sounds kind of flat. Since the paper is so important to the character speaking, it probably should be given more emphasis. The only other issue is that there seems to be a little too much space between sentences. I really only heard this on the Wall Street Journal demo.
Good job,
Elizabeth

[Eliz_10]

Hello Touzet,
I love both your spots. The rich, deep tones of your voice and the “heartland” delivery make each very believable. They feel like they come straight from the heart. I can easily hear your voice narrating a Clydesdale/Budweiser commercial.

Good job,
Elizabeth

[Eliz_10]

Hi,
I’m working on some “character” demos and would appreciate feedback from the group. The demos are “Cranky old lady”, supposed to be humorous, and “The Evil Queen”, hopefully not humorous.
Thanks for comments.
Elizabeth

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