Elise Duke
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Hi everyone! Your feedback on these samples is much appreciated. I’m looking for your feedback on connectivity to the reads, choppiness and tone. Thank you!
Hi everyone! Can you please provide your feedback on these samples? Particularly – did I engage the listener?, how was my overall flow?, and/or how was my speed? Apparently I was in a space mood 🙂 Thank you!
Hi Joyce! I agree with Lindsey on varying your pitch when reading a list within a sentence. I think you can end each word in the list in a slightly different tone – higher, then slightly lower, and so on. I have trouble with this too 🙂 You want your listener to hear the first three items, and think… I get “analog instrumentation?,” “a leather steering wheel??” “AND contoured bucket seats?!?!”… wow I need a Buick!
Keep up the good work!
I agree with the person below in that it sounds like you’re reading and it’s a bit choppy. I think if you made it sound more conversational, it would be great! I think you could also shorten the pause in between sentences and especially after “on the way over here.” Have some fun exaggerating “Mexico” to make it a bit more playful. Great job!
Hi Rusty, great job on the reads! I think you can make the first part of the Sample read flow a bit more instead of adding a pause after “partner.” I think the pause after “new family” is perfect!
I also like the overall sound of the Explainer. It’s a bit hard to tell where there should be pauses and/or where it could flow more. Your overall tone sounds great in both. Great job and good luck in your demo!!
Hi Gill! I agree with Lance in that I didn’t hear any odd or out of place pauses – great job! I loved the overall tone of Clorox – informative, playful and convinces me to want to buy some Clorox wipes!
I also echo Lance’s comment about the Harvey read. I think you can add some changes in your tone to give it a more playful vibe (like the Clorox read). Great work!
Hi cammons01! The American Airlines read started off great! It sounded welcoming and comfortable. The very, very end sounded rushed.
When you’re reading a list (for example, “your flight, your destination AND the equipment…”), it’s been suggested to me to not exaggerate the “and” so as not to draw too much attention to it and rather focus on the other words in the list. You can also vary the tone of your voice for each word in the list. This is feedback I’ve received and am working on this myself. I hope that helps!
Hi everyone! Would love your feedback on these two samples. Specifically, how was my pace and conversational tone? Any feedback is appreciated!
