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Hey guys! Could you pls. give me feedback on my commercial reads attached? Thank YOU!
Disney Cruise Line:
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I thought I respected myself. That is, until I saw myself get high. It’s just an u**y side of myself that I didn’t recognize. Saying and doing things that… just weren’t me. I do respect myself, that’s why I don’t do drugs.Hello Friends! Could you pls. give feedback on my commercial reads attached? Thank YOU!
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@cknipe– Yaaassss!!!! MUCH BETTER!!! See the difference? all 3 are much better reads than the previous ones. Good job!
Hey guys, me again!
Could you pls. take a listen and provide honest feedback on my 3 commercial reads attached? Appreciate it and thank YOU for your input and time! I did 2 reads for the first 2 😉
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@HeatherDT– You are right on the Microsoft read. I think I cut too much of the breathing in-between each line when I edited. Tried to follow my coach’s note on that one, so I think I might over did it. Thank you!
@Ems412– Yeah, I think I read that line too quickly unconsciously… Thank you for the note and will take that in consideration.Hello Edge Friends!
Could you pls. take a listen and provide honest feedback on my 4 commercial reads attached? Appreciate it and thank YOU!
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Rethink Possible.Hi cknipe! Great diction and enunciation. Love your voice too. I would suggest trying to connect with the copy a bit more. In the Cosmos for instance, I wanna be able to picture what you are describing. Take your time in the pacing with narrations. You’ve got this!
Hi RoxyMel! This was so beautiful. You have a nice, soothing quality to your voice. My comment on this read would be to make sure you’re not chopping some of your sentences. This is specifically at 00:13 “and a picture of… a cow jumping over…” I would suggest reading it together so it flows better 😉 Other than that, I think this was pretty sweet!
