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Hi. I really like this read! Definitely a different vocal take from HD’s current representation! Love the simple emotion in the word “replaced”, and the “find it…” line flows so well. great read!
Hello All. Another Homework upload. Looking forward to any feedback. Thanks!
“Welcome to the Animal Planet Stadium in Silver Spring Maryland where the event of the year has gone to the dogs. The top puppy players from all over the country have been training for this moment all season long..”
Hi. I really like the BMW read! And the others too. My input is to take your time with each idea, especially with Cosmos. My coach tells me to “play the action”, so really give the cosmos SPACE! :). great job getting all 3 reads posted!
Hi Suecat. Thank you so much for the input! I will give it a little more yum! Appreciate the feedback!
Hello all. This is my first read for homework. Looking forward to reading feedback and improving!
“Godiva chocolate. It’s like mistletoe, only more effective. In fact, there’s no telling what type of reacitons you’ll receive when you give Godiva this holiday season. But one thing is for sure. It will be worth it to find out. Call 1 800 GODIVA or visit us at http://www.godiva.com.”
**just heard the “9 Godiva”….where did that come from? 🙁
Hi Steve. Nice work! I really like the pace and emotion you gave this read. Maybe a little more emotion in the last sentence? Just a side note, I noticed there is no “was” in “knew he special”. I add words in too, is why i notice. 🙂
Hi Chris. Great work! Way to get 3 reads on the forum! I am very new; my beginner impressions are take your time (its an issue for me, so always on my mind) especially in the Cosmos read, and, for example, in About Horror, vampires- to werewolves…-. Give the listed items space. I like how you gave the 4H read such a documentary feel. 🙂
