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Finally… an ad for Excedrin. More tonal variation here. Constructive criticism appreciated. Thank you for listening. I know I posted a lot today. 🙏🏼 🙂
Excedrin
Headaches. We all get them. We all wish they would go away. There is a solution. Excedrin. I just take two and there’s no more tension, no more throbbing, no more pain. My headache is completely gone.…and here’s a quick punchy ad for anti-perspirant. 🙂 Overly serious? Thanks for feedback.
Adidas Anti-Perspirant
Total control. Total performance. Introducing Adidas Anti-Perspirants and Deodorants. Adidas … when life is rough.Hi again! Here’s something else – an audiobook excerpt I recorded. It’s non-fiction – a memoir of the great 20th century philosopher, Ludwig Wittgenstein, by his friend and colleague, Norman Malcolm. It’s a bit long, so listen only as far as you’re interested. All feedback appreciated, as always. Thanks folks!
Hi folks. Here’s a promo spot I’ve recorded. Feedback welcome and appreciated.
Ancient Mysteries
Be it endless fascination with the Bible, or chilling tales of Gothic horror, man has been compelled by the wonders of the unknown since the beginning of time. From the possible existence of Big Foot to the grips of a mummy’s curse. Uncover the truth behind “Ancient Mysteries” tonight on Channel 4 … NBC.Hey Rich! Really like your vocal quality. Very nice read. My comments may be more for me, than you, as I train my ears to hear things. 🙂 I especially like the opening “If you lived before our time,” which is immediately engaging. I notice a slight change in tonal quality right after the comma, which would be appropriate, however the voice sounds different somehow – a little less full perhaps – maybe because of the rise in pitch, which threw me off a little. Very minor, though. Not sure if you hear what I mean. I think there could be slightly longer pauses between the 4 questions on the 4th to last line. I am imagining changing visuals while the listener contemplates each question. Finally, I like what you do with “Where the past.. comes alive”, however I think “Where the past” is a little too fast. Thanks for allowing me to comment. I’m wondering if you can please comment on how or from where you pick the music pieces for background. Thanks. I like it! I look forward to hearing more of your work.
Hi Bill. Really good! If I notice anything it would be that the greatest tone variation/inflection comes at the halfway mark with “luckily, kids were”, where the first phrase and first idea closes, and then right toward the end, where the piece closes. Is there something about coming to the end of a phrase or section that inspires more looseness and tonal variation? It may be on purpose, as with the Silverado ad, however I really like what you do with the tonal variation and think it would enhance other parts of the read as well. Thanks for sharing.
Hey Rich! Great to hear your version of this. I like it, especially some of your choices for word emphasis. Would love your feedback on my read, just below, if you’re willing. With Bill’s feedback, I’m going to try for a more reserved read. Good to meet you! – Daniel
Thanks Bill! Appreciate it. I love how you are able to hear and put a name on the style – folksy. You’re right on. Thank you! Although I could hear the style of inflection I was delivering, honestly, I wasn’t fully aware what I was doing was a folksy style. It’s really helpful for me to be able to identify it like that, so I can go back to it if I want to, or… avoid it, if I want something different. With your feedback I’m going to go back and try to record it with a more sophisticated/reserved read and see what I get. And if you have time, I would love to hear how you think the “maybe” would be best read. 🙂 Thanks tons! – Daniel
