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Hi Dave. Daniel in San Diego. You’ve got a great voice for this! I hear the pace was directed by the client. That may be the case, but you may want to use one of your takes to let them hear what it would sound like a little faster and with shorter pauses. It seems a bit too slowed down. Just my impression. Pace aside, I think you could still vary your second take from the first even more than you have. You use somewhat more tonal range in the second one, but less than you could maybe? I hear the 2 “character” voices, which is good, but they’re still quite similar to my ear. The depth of your natural voice already suggests a “cowboy” quality so I don’t think you even need to put the character voice on. Just having the thought in your mind will bring it out enough. Otherwise, it can sound exaggerated in parts. My two cents, of course, and I’m splitting hairs because they’re already both very good reads that show lots of possibility. Excellent!
Hi Lorraine.
Daniel in San Diego. Agree with Amanda, you have a very soothing, nice sounding voice, which is a gift. Also agree you could pick up the pace a bit and reduce pauses, which will definitely make it sound more authentic/conversational. I think because your voice is soothing (and considering that e-learning can at times be plodding), I think your take would also improve if you project more, with a slightly less soft tone, especially in the first part of the script. It might also encourage a wider tonal range and a more dynamic opening. Hope this helps. Good work. Thanks for sharing.
Hi Amanda.
Daniel here, in San Diego. Nice work. My sense is that both takes improve in the second half of your delivery and become more conversational and relatable, which is great. You seem to have more energy as you go and more tonal/dynamic range, which ultimately sounds more natural. A suggestion I was given is to use a leader before launching into the script to help get to the right voice and energy. Your pace is very good overall. It might be 10% faster in the earlier parts that seem to display less range, which might help this. In the corporate narration, the pauses between the list of things might be a touch longer than necessary. I think you’re good on word emphasis. My two cents. Hope it helps. Best of luck!
Finally… an ad for Excedrin. More tonal variation here. Constructive criticism appreciated. Thank you for listening. I know I posted a lot today. 🙏🏼 🙂
Excedrin
Headaches. We all get them. We all wish they would go away. There is a solution. Excedrin. I just take two and there’s no more tension, no more throbbing, no more pain. My headache is completely gone.…and here’s a quick punchy ad for anti-perspirant. 🙂 Overly serious? Thanks for feedback.
Adidas Anti-Perspirant
Total control. Total performance. Introducing Adidas Anti-Perspirants and Deodorants. Adidas … when life is rough.Hi again! Here’s something else – an audiobook excerpt I recorded. It’s non-fiction – a memoir of the great 20th century philosopher, Ludwig Wittgenstein, by his friend and colleague, Norman Malcolm. It’s a bit long, so listen only as far as you’re interested. All feedback appreciated, as always. Thanks folks!
Hi folks. Here’s a promo spot I’ve recorded. Feedback welcome and appreciated.
Ancient Mysteries
Be it endless fascination with the Bible, or chilling tales of Gothic horror, man has been compelled by the wonders of the unknown since the beginning of time. From the possible existence of Big Foot to the grips of a mummy’s curse. Uncover the truth behind “Ancient Mysteries” tonight on Channel 4 … NBC.Hey Rich! Really like your vocal quality. Very nice read. My comments may be more for me, than you, as I train my ears to hear things. 🙂 I especially like the opening “If you lived before our time,” which is immediately engaging. I notice a slight change in tonal quality right after the comma, which would be appropriate, however the voice sounds different somehow – a little less full perhaps – maybe because of the rise in pitch, which threw me off a little. Very minor, though. Not sure if you hear what I mean. I think there could be slightly longer pauses between the 4 questions on the 4th to last line. I am imagining changing visuals while the listener contemplates each question. Finally, I like what you do with “Where the past.. comes alive”, however I think “Where the past” is a little too fast. Thanks for allowing me to comment. I’m wondering if you can please comment on how or from where you pick the music pieces for background. Thanks. I like it! I look forward to hearing more of your work.
Hi Bill. Really good! If I notice anything it would be that the greatest tone variation/inflection comes at the halfway mark with “luckily, kids were”, where the first phrase and first idea closes, and then right toward the end, where the piece closes. Is there something about coming to the end of a phrase or section that inspires more looseness and tonal variation? It may be on purpose, as with the Silverado ad, however I really like what you do with the tonal variation and think it would enhance other parts of the read as well. Thanks for sharing.
