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Hi Everyone,
I’m working on scripts for my narration demo and would love some feedback.
Script 1: Music is a language just like you would read aloud from a book. The symbols you will see on pages of sheet music have been used for hundreds of years. They represent the pitch, speed, and rhythm of the song they convey, as well as expression and techniques used by a musician to play the piece. Think of the notes as the letters, the measures as the words, the phrases as the sentences and so forth. In the following video, we will explore the basics of learning to read music, first by going through the staff and the two clefs, and then the notes on the staff.
Script 2: The Battle of Gettysburg was a significant Union victory considered by many to be the turning point of the Civil War. In the summer of 1863, Confederate General Robert E. Lee launched his second invasion of the Northern states, hoping to capitalize on recent Confederate victories and defeat the Union army on Northern soil. Union Major Generals Joseph H****r and George Meade pursued Lee, colliding at the crossroads town of Gettysburg, Pennsylvania, on the morning of July 1. The battle lasted 3 days, ending with the failure of Lee’s second invasion of the North. Said to be the bloodiest single battle of the entire Civil War, there were an estimated 51,000 casualties on both sides.
Thanks!
Hi Shmuel. Great reads! I only have one note on your second recording. Is there a comma in between “…bite count”? The pause in between those two words kind of sounds like two separate sentences, and I would try without the pause. Other than that, great work.
Hi Sarah. This read sounds a bit choppy which is affecting the pacing. I would try this read and think about telling your best friend (or have someone in mind), which may help pick up the pace and make it sound more conversational.
Hi Everyone!
Here’s a recording of an e-learning narration script as I continue to work towards my narration demo. Any and all feedback is much appreciated!
Reading music is often seen as a mysterious and arcane art – but it doesn’t have to be that way! The easy-to-follow lessons and innovative accompanying CD in How to Read Music will show you how to decode those little black dots and, in a short time, you’ll be surprised how fluent you’ve become!
