BrianWigginsVO
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so the first thing I noticed was that all of the reads were essentially exactly the same in terms of the pacing, tone, and emotion. That’s something that should be varied, as each read would be attempting to reach a different audience, and achieve a different goal, right?
Also, in each there were some cases of slurred words, so make sure to slow down.
Finally, was this recorded on your phone just for the sake of practice? If yes, then no worries…if not, you’ll definitely need to work on your setup.
Good evening!
Okay, so you have a great tone, first of all. The read was a little rushed, though, and it resulted in some words being smushed together. Slow it down and let it breathe a little.
Love your tone and texture, definitely has some natural gravitas to it. To that end, though, I don’t feel your connection to the script; it feels “read” as opposed to “delivered”, it that makes any sense. Given the material, this should have weight to it, right? That’s where you have to use your natural tools (that voice of yours) and bring some more performance to it. Let it breath a bit, give it more variety in emphasis.
Also, is this a bit long for a demo? I don’t know what yours will be like when it’s complete, but the one I had produced through Edge for narration was 6 scripts, each at about 18 seconds long to offer a variety of tone and delivery. But if you are making this as a stand-alone piece, than having multiple reads doesn’t matter, I suppose.
Same notes as above…great tone, maybe a tad slower, especially at the end when you’re giving the website address. Who are you working with, if you don’t mind me asking?
Love the tone and your delivery on this…there was a real earnestness to it. Maybe slow down like 3.6% (but that’s just one opinion, take it for what it’s worth), and the only real note I have is that the end tag is really rushed, especially to your nearly dead-on pacing with the rest of it. But other than that, great!
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Hoping to submit this ASAP, so any feedback regarding delivery will be very helpful. Three scripts all with the same direction: “In a tone that’s intellectual and energetic”.
Script 1:
Doctors specialize in treating patients, not negotiating drug contracts and rates.
That’s where GPOs come in – to serve physicians.
Smart GPOs rely on data to ensure providers have access to the right therapeutic choices at the best value.Script 2:
Distribution is the critical link between pharmaceutical manufacturers and healthcare providers
Because AmerisourceBergen offers specialty distribution to its partners,
we understand that a specialty distributor has knowledge of their patient base and specific needs of specialty physician practices.Script 3:
At a time when health systems are challenged to maximize revenue capture, Drug reimbursement requirements are changing and complex.
Even with an increased focus on this area, it can be difficult for a health system to have a holistic view of the revenue cycle and its complexities, spanning everything from drug procurement to reimbursement.First, welcome to the forum!
Of the two reads, the second was your best. I could hear the smile as you read, and it felt more genuine and natural. The first was a little flat; I didn’t hear you connecting with the material.
In both cases, there were a couple of rushed parts that slurred together a bit: in read 1, “lighter than the competition”, and in read 2 “for tracking expenses” and “meaningful to your business”.
Good luck! Keep at it!
No worries, and I’m from the NE as well, so I feel your pain. I actually had someone tell me about 12 years ago when I first tried getting into VO that my accent was “too thick” and that he couldn’t ever work with me again (after he paid me $30 for what should have been around $150 worth of work). Don’t worry, it will all come together with patience and practice. Are you working with any of the coaches through Edge? The ones I’ve been fortunate enough to work with have been awesome and really helped me along.
