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Hey Jay, really nice work on all three of these. Very solid tonal contrast!
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I’d like to hear a little bit more of the “T” in “writers” come out at the beginning. It sounded slightly too soft and I thought you said “riders” the first time listening. Could’ve just been your mic, but it stuck out to me. Aside from that, I liked this one a lot. Good pivots throughout the sentences, and you listed off the writers and attractions very well too.Texicon Family
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I thought your delivery throughout all of this was totally fine. Very friendly and good-humored which works well for corporate explainer stuff like this.Voice For the City of Toronto
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I think you should refer to “We’re all in this together” as a “phrase” instead of a “term” for starters. I think that’s just the more correct term to use for it. Aside from that I really like this one. You lift up all the relevant words super well and it just flows and makes sense.Hey guys! Just dropping off some samples before an upcoming narration demo prep. I’d love to hear any feedback!
For Freshii, I really love the way you made the “..and a little salsa fresca?” have this sorta not intimate, but nice “whisper” that I totally could see triggering someone’s craving. I think that whole reading was pretty much perfect.
As for the Betty Crocker reading, I think it would help to maybe emphasize the quotes around “she was ‘born'” a little more since she wasn’t literally born. There’s also a long pause between “to win” and “a pin cushion.” I assume you were just taking a breath there and I’m sure that could easily be edited since you maintain a consistent delivery between them anyway.
There’s also a problem with both files where they cut off before you get to the last words so I can’t hear how you wrap it up loool, but overall, nice work on both of these 🙂
Hey all, just dropping off a few narration recordings for homework. Appreciate any and all critiques 😀
Hey all, this is a video I narrated for a company’s YouTube channel. I know the subject matter probably isn’t for everyone, but I’d appreciate any and all feedback you may have! Whenever I do narrations for them, I sort of talk like I’m announcing so I’m not sure if I’d say it’s my “true” voice, but they seem to like it so I haven’t changed much haha.. Personally, I feel like I sometimes beat people over the head with the emphasizing, but I also feel it’s important to point out the important terms in guide-styled videos like these. What do you think? https://youtu.be/NTdA4mBVBlY
