[BONKmk]

Hey Jay, really nice work on all three of these. Very solid tonal contrast!

Dublin 2
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I’d like to hear a little bit more of the “T” in “writers” come out at the beginning. It sounded slightly too soft and I thought you said “riders” the first time listening. Could’ve just been your mic, but it stuck out to me. Aside from that, I liked this one a lot. Good pivots throughout the sentences, and you listed off the writers and attractions very well too.

Texicon Family
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I thought your delivery throughout all of this was totally fine. Very friendly and good-humored which works well for corporate explainer stuff like this.

Voice For the City of Toronto
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I think you should refer to “We’re all in this together” as a “phrase” instead of a “term” for starters. I think that’s just the more correct term to use for it. Aside from that I really like this one. You lift up all the relevant words super well and it just flows and makes sense.

[BONKmk]

Hey guys! Just dropping off some samples before an upcoming narration demo prep. I’d love to hear any feedback!

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[BONKmk]

For Freshii, I really love the way you made the “..and a little salsa fresca?” have this sorta not intimate, but nice “whisper” that I totally could see triggering someone’s craving. I think that whole reading was pretty much perfect.

As for the Betty Crocker reading, I think it would help to maybe emphasize the quotes around “she was ‘born'” a little more since she wasn’t literally born. There’s also a long pause between “to win” and “a pin cushion.” I assume you were just taking a breath there and I’m sure that could easily be edited since you maintain a consistent delivery between them anyway.

There’s also a problem with both files where they cut off before you get to the last words so I can’t hear how you wrap it up loool, but overall, nice work on both of these 🙂

[BONKmk]

Hey all, just dropping off a few narration recordings for homework. Appreciate any and all critiques 😀

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Hey all, this is a video I narrated for a company’s YouTube channel. I know the subject matter probably isn’t for everyone, but I’d appreciate any and all feedback you may have! Whenever I do narrations for them, I sort of talk like I’m announcing so I’m not sure if I’d say it’s my “true” voice, but they seem to like it so I haven’t changed much haha.. Personally, I feel like I sometimes beat people over the head with the emphasizing, but I also feel it’s important to point out the important terms in guide-styled videos like these. What do you think? https://youtu.be/NTdA4mBVBlY

[BONKmk]

Here they are as MP3s.

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Hey all, first time uploading here after a session for homework. Any critiques for any of these three narrations would be super appreciated!

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