[billmull]

There is a lot to like about this audio. You can do some amazing things with your voice, and I think this could make for a fabulous commercial demo!

I think there is room for improvement on the second script of your diction of the client name, i.e. Amstel Light. It doesn’t come through as entirely clear.

Also, my understanding of commercial demos is that they tend to be short, usually about a minute long. So this audio in its entirety would be considered long for such a demo. You might consider pairing it down a bit.

Otherwise, awesome!

[billmull]

Hello Folks!

I welcome any feedback.

Note that one line of the “partnership” script reads “Accessory Dwelling Units (ADUs)”. So ADUs is not a separate item in the list but is simply the acronym for “Accessory Dwelling Units” so I tried to read it with same style and pitch.

Thanks

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Sorry. I accidently posted this as a reply.

[billmull]

Hello Folks!

I welcome any feedback.

Note that one line of the “partnership” script reads “Accessory Dwelling Units (ADUs)”. So ADUs is not a separate item in the list but is simply the acronym for “Accessory Dwelling Units” so I tried to read it with same style and pitch.

Thanks

Thanks,

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[billmull]

Thanks for the response.

Your feedback is very perceptive. Truth be told, I did not feel very good copy connection to the script, but I decided to take a shot at it anyway to see if I could pull it off (which obviously I didn’t). A lesson which I continue to learn about VO is that you can’t fake it. We have to believe what we’re saying or the listeners will be able to tell.

You’re the second person who has told me that they hear sibilance in my reads, so I’ve gotten a hold of a de-esser which I plan to start applying to my audio recordings.

[billmull]

I would love any feedback.

I’m aware that I have some breathing sounds in some of the pauses but I chose to leave those in.

Thanks

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[billmull]

I didn’t notice mouth noises or clicks on your recording.

Not to beat this into the ground, but de-clicker that comes by default with Audacity is not considered to be that great. The plugin I’m referring to is considered to be much better. If this is what you used then please ignore me.

[billmull]

I’m having trouble finding anything not to like about this read.

Not sure if you know this or not but there is a free de-clicking plug-in you can download for audacity. Search on “de-clicker plugin audacity” and you’ll find it.

[billmull]

Hello,

I give you high marks on pace, diction, and conversational style for both reads.

For recording2 I suggest that when you get to the punchline to go a bit more over the top to accentuate the joke (because it’s a good one).

I understand that you recorded these on your phone, but the muffled quality of the sound does make it hard to clearly hear your voice and evaluate your speaking as much as would be ideal. So if there is a way that in the future you could find another way to record your speaking that may be a good idea.

[billmull]

Happy Sunday!

Please no feedback on technical recording quality. Otherwise, I welcome any feedback.

Thank you

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