[BJ]

Thanks – this is so very helpful. I need to edit my copy for now I see how what I penned is confusing!

[BJ]

Hi John – Thanks for your kind words and in-depth feedback. Yes, I am going for a more detached approach for Jury Service. Perhaps, I took it too far? Also, is there any chance you could tell me specifically where you feel my rhythm is off in Stax V2?

[BJ]

Hi – I’m working away at building my narration demo. Would you please listen to these short reads and giving me some feedback? The first two are for a government agency and the second two are for a museum. What works? What doesn’t? Which versions of each do you prefer? Appreciate you!

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[BJ]

Hi – Of the two, I think Pete’s is stronger. You sound more conversational. I do think you can really play up the first couple of lines where you talk about Marie – have fun with it. In the Corolla spot, it may be just me but I think the beginning was cut off. If it helps, think of having a conversation with a friend about this car – you’re excited and energized when talking about this car. I think you can pick up your pace, especially in the beginning. I’m not a techie, so I can’t offer remedies, but I did notice that your recordings sound cavernous (hoping someone on the Forum can offer some guidance). Looking forward to hearing your next records.

[BJ]

Hi – Excuse my delay in getting back with you. You have a very natural, warm and conversational delivery. I really like the expressiveness you bring to specific words. Is this a commercial read? If so, I’d be curious how this would sound if you brought more energy to your delivery and brought up the music a bit. Overall, really well done! Thanks again for giving my snippets a listen. BJ

[BJ]

Hi – Thanks for the thumbs up and kind words. I’m traveling now, but promise to give a listen to The Farmers Dog soon.

[BJ]

Hi Brianna – Thanks for your kind words and feedback:)!

[BJ]

Hi – Please help me build my narration demo by listening to these short reads and giving me some feedback. The first two are for a non-profit and the second two are for pet adoption. What works? What doesn’t? Do let me know which versions of each you prefer, too. Appreciate you!

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[BJ]

Hi Elena – Very easy to listen to your tone and pace. Great pronunciation. Neuroendocrine – there’s a slight hesitation between “electron” and “microscopy.” Social Security – I think you can go a bit warmer here – more conversational. Both recordings sound echoey.

[BJ]

Hi Atperry – I must admit. I’m a sucker for deep voices – yours is beautiful! Overall – nice job! Just a couple of thoughts – trying reading this with a bit of a smile so that the read is warmer but still professional. Also, try backing up from the mic a bit to avoid mouth sounds.

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