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Thanks, Bill. I can see what you mean about the inflection on “That are Exaggerated”. I appreciate it!
BarbHey John, Overall I think your intonations are on.
What I’d work on is pacing. Give each line more room to breathe. Truly feel what you’re describing, see it in your mind’s eye.Really give the punctuation its due.
Keep on this! You’ve got it!
More Homework! This is written to be a :60, so there will be lots of visuals to fill in. I do see these “pharma” auditions from time to time, so feedback would be wonderful.
I love that you sound genuinely interested in the topic! It sounds like a narration, perhaps for middle schoolers?
That said, I bet you’re one of those folks whose natural joy comes through (guilty here!) so I don’t think you need to work so hard at it.
When doing narrations about something I can visualize, I like to imagine I’m painting a picture as I go. It slows me down because I picture the brush strokes. I think you can speak the lines a little slower, and space them out further to give time for the visuals, and viewer reflection.
You got this!
Hi Burdahgirl, on the whole, nice job!
Lead in lines are great!I like #3, but I would bring in even more excitement about your trip. And I’d think you could get away with “uh-hundred and Seventy-nine” for the trip cost. Makes it more conversational.
There’s something I do, that I hear in you…a precision or carefulness with the script. It’s hard to be brave enough not to be perfect! Try taking it line by line, and MEMORIZE the line, don’t read it. It may help!
You got this!
Another piece for class, where I’m looking for your review. It’s a :60 for Levis. Just another one I really like. Thanks in advance!
