AyalC93
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I’m still in the learning process myself but personally I really like the tone you’ve chosen for these two scripts. They feel candid enough to not feel fake but presented in a way that feels proper for the promotion you’re bringing.
My two points of feedback if I may.
1) There’s a good amount of “Mouth noises”, particularly in the first one. I have literally just gone through so much annoyance with fixing that myself so my ears kind of just focused on finding that now lol. Hydrating and eating a green apple before I recorded solved it for me so maybe give that a shot.
2) There were a lot of breaths in the audio. Completely understandable since these were one take recordings. Just a silencing between the lines and at the end of the track would (I think) improve the overall quality of them
Again, I am just still being coached and learning myself so don’t take my feedback too far but these would be the things I’d be finding in my homework recordings. So giving feedback is also helping me learn.
Otherwise, like I said earlier, your tone and volume to me are great an the read themselves were also. Hope I helped!
Thanks for the feedback! Plosives were definitely something I worked to soften in the editing but still came across some that were just being troublesome. I left them in after doing what I could for the express purpose of hearing feedback on them. I only just learned about changing the angle of my mic, so that will something I use for sure going forward. Didn’t know about smiling while pronouncing those sounds though. I’ll get used to that technique and add it to my limited, but growing, toolkit. Thank you!
Reading fast will be probably the biggest thing I have to get over. I talk fast naturally and I feel so weird slowing down! But it’s fun nontheless. Thanks!
Oooo thanks for these suggestions! I had taken the Medical one as an informative video if you will, kind of like something someone would find on a site they end up on researching the surgery. Didn’t think to interpret it as talking to a family member. That’s a good angle. And I definitely am a fast talker in general. Slowing down is going to be one of my biggest hurdles lol.
And I was definitely more comfortable with the second read. Me and my coach went over thinking it felt like a slideshow of sorts for kids learning about recycling. Still want to make it fun and approachable without coming off as condescending(?). Looking at it like I’m explaining it to an adult would change my tone I’m sure. Thanks!
