[AlexisVO]

Thanks very much for your feedback!

[AlexisVO]

Thanks! I get what you mean. I appreciate your feedback.

[AlexisVO]

Thanks, Lexi!

[AlexisVO]

Nice job on these scripts! Out of the 3, I think your enthusiasm builds with each read. The Sandals one has a good pace and I can clearly hear all the words in the script, but I didn’t feel a lot of energy. It’s nice and relaxed, which is what you want to be on vacation. You sounded more excited about Spotify and your energy was great for the cereal script. Good pace and inflection too.

[AlexisVO]

Hi Kevin, I like your read of the script. I thought you started out with a good energy level and kept that going, and the pace was good. In terms of sound quality, you sounded far away from the mic and I feel like I didn’t fully hear the range of your voice.

I noticed that the script talks about 9 planets…R.I.P. Pluto, you’ll always be #9 to me! 🙂

[AlexisVO]

Hi all, Looking for any feedback on this corporate narration script. Thanks!

Welcome to advance technology incorporated and to the excitement and challenges of a growing business. As a new employee, your job is important to us. Your success is an important factor in the success of this company. This software is designed to offer you accurate information about company policies and procedures, benefit packages, performance reviews, training and education opportunities.

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[AlexisVO]

Really nice job, John. I like the first one, it’s very clear and your tone is good for a biography style. The pace is on the slow side, which works if it’s going to be a TV documentary (I was picturing it paired with visuals), but could be considered too slow if this script is meant for something else like an audiobook, for example. It’s hard to interpret when we just pull a script from the library with no context of how it’s going to be used. The second script is really good, too. It feels like your tone gets a bit more conversational as you read through it. Nice job on both!

[AlexisVO]

Hi Mary, I like your pace for this read, and you have good clarity in what you’re saying. For a different take I would suggest maybe having a little more friendly energy and smile, as if you were my friend or neighbor and you use this service all the time and you’re excited to tell me why it’s been so helpful to you. Best, Alexis

[AlexisVO]

I think your pace and energy are great. Your read is friendly but still communicates the important info. Nice job!

[AlexisVO]

Thanks, everyone, for your comments!

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