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Hi Daniel!
These scripts will be great for you. I agree with Luke – you want to have some variety in your reads. These both came across very similar with inflection, pace and tone. A few more things to consider working on. In your Acura script – you’ll want to watch pronunciation (look up how to pronounce Acura on YouTube). As well, when you say future – it sounds like you are saying feature. So be careful there. I can really tell you are trying to connect the words in each of the sentences, but they are a little to connected and sounds like you aren’t giving yourself enough time to experience the words themselves. Also, a great recommendation from all of my coaches is – who are you speaking to? Think about that for each of the scripts to see if that can help you change them up a bit. Sorry this is a lot! Hope it was helpful!
-AmberHi SuperLuke!
First the tone, pace, pitch, etc are all great in this read. If you are looking for quality of recording the room you are in sound nice and silent. However, I had a bit of a hard time hearing you at times, I would check the output of the recording and make sure it’s hitting the correct dB – when I took the Audacity class we were looking for it to hit from -6 to 0. If you are much lower than -12 it’s going to be hard for the person receiving the audio.Best of luck to you in your demo recording!
-AmberHello!
Looking for some feedback on both tone and pace for this one specifically! If you hear anything in the background my heat is running and my fingers were too cold to sacrifice it for the recording!“Do you know me? Probably not. In my business, recognition is always important, but when I’m buying goods online, I prefer a little privacy. With Private Payments from American Express, I get the security of a unique number created for each business transaction I make. Because my private information is my business, and American Express keeps it that way.”
John – I really felt like your pitch and tone were good on all of the reads. Like Kateyln, my feedback would be centered around the pace. The first and last scripts that you have definitely call for a bit faster of a pace to bring more energy into the read. I would work on changing the pace throughout each of these so that there is some differentiation in each of the scripts. Best of luck! Great scripts for your voice!
Great work Sarah!
I agree with Monibr16 that I do hear some echo in the room, but your mic sounds awesome with your voice! I would also recommend slowing down just a bit. It feels as if you were rushing a bit during the last third of the read. Best of luck to you on your journey!
-Amber
Hi Artyom!
First and I am sure I have said this before, your voice is great. I love the deep resonance that you have. If you were looking for an emotional connection on this- I got bit more of a robotic vibe on the first sentence. I think it is specially when you are saying “page” and reads” that you are really drawing those words out so it feels a bit forced and more robotic. I would recommend trying to smooth that out just a bit. You are extremely clear and appropriately crisp throughout the rest of the read though!Hi Jay!
Good job on this. I like how you are connected the words together on this – it flows well for the most part. When you say “make your flight” at the beginning the pace is off and it does feel a bit choppy. It also feels just a bit too melodic as you continue through the read as if you are running up and down and up and down in a similar rhythm and tone through each of the sentences. I would recommend just putting a bit of variety throughout the read!
Have fun!
-AmberJay – I could see the intro “flyover the ocean… birds flapping…approaching a desolate island”. Your voice really set me up for that visual. This is a great one for you. I felt as if you were running out of breath on “…wilderness” so just something to keep an ear out for. I would also recommend connecting “6 billion” more and distressing the “6”. It sounds a little harsh. I enjoy how it sounds like you are whispering in the mic! If you are looking for another way to read – pretend like you are speaking to a children’s classroom. I often find if I read in 2 completely different ways I can find a good balance between the 2. Have fun!
-AmberHi Roert –
You have a great reassuring tone to your voice. I’m not sure I heard a great deal of difference between each of the reads (I’ve received the same feedback here) so can’t say I have a preference of one over the other. I really like the pace of this so I don’t know how you get it in at 26 seconds!? One element to think about is that when you are talking about death you are really taking your pitch up and it feels more positive than I think the script is trying for. I would recommend taking an approach that you are talking to your best friend and maybe not lecturing him but giving him a stern warning that he may not be setting up his family in the best way. This may give you another variety to compare the reads. Articulation and clarity were great!
-Amber
