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Hi Suecat –
Welcome to the forum! I couldn’t listen to these easily as they were exported in an .m4a vs an .mp3. I’m thinking that’s why you don’t have any feedback.
Kashi Read: Your enunciation and tone of the read are great. When you say “must there be h**l in a heavenly…” line, I think you may want to make sure that you think about the purpose of the line and what you are trying to envoke from the person you are speaking to. Love the ending – great way to keep us interested.
Chewy Read: Make sure to know who you are speaking to. This felt more like you were reading it to me then telling me something about Chewy. I know our coaches tell us all the time, but picture that person you are trying to talk to and let that help inform your pitch and tone.Good luck to you! Looking forward to hearing more!
-AmberLove your energy and hope the demo recording goes well! I had some challenges understanding a few things, but wonder if this was just because you were a bit too close to the mic or if your gain was set too high? At the end when you go into the western cowboy accent, I felt like you were straying between a western cowboy and an old gothic character, so would just recommend clarifying a bit. Really enjoy how you play with the variety of pace!
-AmberI love that we have one of the same reads and I’ll be interested in the contrasting feedback we will get!
Read 1: You started out great – I felt like you were pulling me into a full-on story as opposed to a commercial. I felt like you lost that about mid-way through and got a bit into a rhythm in your read. I would recommend changing up the pace a bit so it felt like you were telling a story to your best friend instead of reading a story to an audience. Very clear and easy to listen to though – great voice.
Read 2: Again you started out great! I think you got a bit into the iambic pentameter about halfway through and were a bit too rhythmic even as this was poetry. I really think this could be a great one for you though and would try to focus on maintaining your purpose throughout the read.
Read3: This is our same read! Love how your first part starts off and specifically as you read the wet-dry vac line, through “you could”. I could see your audience and know your purpose. My biggest recommendation is to work on not throwing away the end. Home Depot and Rigid are both your clients here and you’ll want to carry them through to the end of the read. I have this same problem and often have to re-record the last lines a few times until I don’t through them away.Great work! Best of luck!
AmberHi Daniel –
For the Pedigree one – I really like how you said “just how dogs like it”. I got the feel that it was actually a dog trying to sell the product to their owner. I wonder if you take that approach to the tone if you’ll be able to gain more energy into the read. The read was very smooth though. I recall some of your earlier posts and can tell that you’ve been working on it. One other element is to work a bit on the diction to bring a little more clarity to your words. I am now doing a vocal warm-up before recording and this has helped me a ton. Here’s a link to what I use if you are interested.https://youtu.be/tW08injjI1MFor the Uber read – I want to be a bit more excited about Dave going out, but I do like the slight change in pitch compared to your first read.
Good luck!
-AmberHello All! Would lover your feedback, especially on tone and pace. I know I have a couple of hard “p” sounds in there so working on that piece. Thanks so much!
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