[Stephen Winburn]

Hi Jacqueline!
I listened to both recordings and i think the Toyota recording is spot on for pace and diction. I’m still learning what it means to sound conversational so no notes from me there!
The Revlon recording i do think the pace is a little hurried though the diction is fine. Listening to the two pieces back to back the Revlon piece just doesn’t carry the same energy as the Toyota one– each line drops at the end, if that makes sense? I’d suggest, as they say, having an opinion about the product and see how that informs your delivery!