Edge Studio has been making spoken word fabulous, for over 30 years! It’s done via voice coaching and voice over recording, in 50+ languages. We also donate to numerous nonprofits and politicians who we support.
I think your voice and the tone you chose matches the script very well. One critique – It sounds to me as if you end most sentences the same way. Shooting for differentiation particularly at the end of your sentences would help to pace the read and keep listeners engaged. I hope you find this helpful