[nicolance]

Hello Amy – great energy. Slow down on Barbie a little – this will help with enunciation – lost the t on adult both times, and the d in assembled. And who are you talking when you say “you can be anything”? It will sound more conversational if you have someone you are telling this to . . .as for Discovery – that is more of a promo than a commercial . . .promos tend to be big – and so if you add more energy and again think about who you are telling this to, you will have more of a conversational tone. Great job on both – Lance