[RGK3]

Hi Dillon:

These are nice. I would consider more of a transition during the pizza hut one for the different types of thoughts: when you switch to “see kids” and then the tag at the end. Same sort of feedback on the Youth Mentoring one. There’s probably an opportunity to change the tone as you start specifically talking about the mentees. Maybe really imagine them and the relationship you have with them and it will come out in the read.