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Shaun Cruz
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Hi,
Just submitting my first ever story narration for feedback.

Thanks!

CORALINE:

CORALINE DISCOVERED THE DOOR a little
while after they moved into the house.
It was a very old house—it had an attic under
the roof and a cellar under the ground and an
overgrown garden with huge old trees in it.
Coraline’s family didn’t own all of the house—it
was too big for that. Instead they owned part of it.
There were other people who lived in the old
house.
Miss Spink and Miss Forcible lived in the flat
below Coraline’s, on the ground floor. They were
both old and round, and they lived in their flat with
a number of ageing Highland terriers who had
names like Hamish and Andrew and J**k. Once
upon a time Miss Spink and Miss Forcible had
been actresses, as Miss Spink told Coraline the
first time she met her.
“You see, Caroline,” Miss Spink said, getting
Coraline’s name wrong, “both myself and Miss
Forcible were famous actresses, in our time. We
trod the boards, luvvy. Oh, don’t let Hamish eat
the fruitcake, or he’ll be up all night with his
tummy.”
“It’s Coraline. Not Caroline. Coraline,” said
Coraline.

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