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Hello Everyone, I would love to hear all feedback for my 3 Narration scripts attached below. Your feedback will be very helpful in any improvement I need going forward. Thank you very much for your time.
Hudson Yard:
They say you can tell you’ve become a real New Yorker the minute you stop looking up.
Looking up’s for the tourists, for the recent transplants – the people who don’t have work to get to, a train to catch.
Looking up’s for the dreamers, for children who haven’t yet outgrown their surroundings…For anyone wide eyed enough to believe New York still lives up to its namesake as someplace new.
But we’ve heard a different story…
Pre-Boarding Announcement:
Good afternoon passengers. This is the pre-boarding announcement for flight 89B to Rome. We are now inviting those passengers with small children, and any passengers requiring special assistance, to begin boarding at this time. Please have your boarding pass and identification ready. Regular boarding will begin in approximately ten minutes time. Thank you.
John F. Kennedy Library and Museum:
Welcome. The John F Kennedy Library and Museum is dedicated to the memory of our nations thirty-fifth President, and to all those, who through the art of politics, seek a new and better world. Our purpose is to advance the study and understanding of President Kennedy’s life and career, and the times in which he lived.
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This reply was modified 3 years, 8 months ago by
Sylvanie.
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This reply was modified 3 years, 8 months ago by
Sylvanie.