[TimDKietzman]

Well, I think you have a great voice and your enunciation of words was well placed. I don’t think you sound conversational though, that’s because you’re stopping abruptly and at one point in the middle of a sentence. To sound conversational, you have to say it like a statement. Also, the tone doesn’t sound much like a car commercial. Most every car commercial is the same so try listening to some for inspiration.