[nettipo1]

This is very good -hard to believe you are a new student! I agree with suecat that you have a soothing voice, and I don’t notice any unnecessary pauses, so it flows into the listener’s ear very smoothly. I noticed that you sort of end with the same inflection point or same level at the end of a sentence or at comma, which might make it more monotone than you’d want, so you might want to break from that pattern a bit. Perhaps see how the phrases are more like thoughts, and combine those thoughts as one scene. Or perhaps visualize that you are saying these words to someone beside you. Overall though, this is a great first posting, so keep posting more!